your opinion, please

[shoebox_rhymes]

now, here's my question for the masses. here is the opening to a story i started late one night on an excess of sugar and probably caffeine. it's mostly finished; my question is, is it worth completing? or is it too, um, dumb?

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[perfectinpart]

I was about to say "I might have to read more to tell you whether or not it is worth completing" then I read the last 4 words. Now I'm intrigued. It seems worth finishing to me!

[shoebox_rhymes]

the hard part is that the story isn't really about plot or character but massive amounts of clever verbage, and the tone has to be just right. i wish i had finished it the night i started it, but i was falling asleep on the keyboard, so. it was cut short.