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[shiro_megane]

How's My Driving?

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[anonymous]

[shiro_megane]

Thank you for taking the time to crit! I appreciate it!

I... don't really see Ishida as consoling Tatsuki, honestly. It isn't that she's uncomfortable with it and needs reassurance. Quite honestly, the reason he's saying what he's saying is because he feels uncomfortable about it (especially given the Quincy principle of protecting women) and is concerned about her, as a classmate and someone he regards as a friend. Also, Ishida, at times, can be socially awkward

[anonymous]

If you're dropping Chie, you need to fill out the drop post. It's rude to keep sitting on her but not dropping her if not playing her is your intention.

[shiro_megane]

It's not my intention to drop her-- I'd like to keep her, if I could, but, unfortunately, I couldn't make the last AC, and she was on the list of those AC'ed out. So, to my understanding, nothing is keeping anyone from picking her up this app round.

[bizarchitecture]

This is just a minor thing, but I noticed recently that you have a tendency to refer the island of Atia as a tropical island (such as in this thread), but I thought it'd be good to just let you know that the island isn't actually tropical. It's described as a Mediterranean island, similar to Greece or the islands surrounding it. Therefore, the weather should be similar to whatever is current in Greece during this time of year, unless the mods specify something about the weather for plots or events.

Again, just a minor detail, but I figured it'd be important to note anyway.

[shiro_megane]

alskdfj It's appreciated, thank you! @///@ I'll try to be better about that. I probably wouldn't have noticed the discrepancy if you hadn't pointed it out.

[bizarchitecture]

Not a problem. I thought maybe it was kinda clear, but I guess not. |D;

[shiro_megane]

It probably has to do with the fact that the first LJ fandom RP I ever played in was on a tropic island. ^^; /derpderp