Comments | shipwar: my first lemon

ilovebishies in shipwar

my first lemon

Apr 28, 2007 21:47

ive just written a new story its got shigi from fushigi yuugi genbu kaiden this time and its also my very first lemon so please be kind

( i heard youre supposed to cut lemons so thats what ill do )

fushigi yuugi, how about this?, i love a fictional character, i hate myself, what do you want little girl, clowns are scary, boys do everything better, haters, im rite ur rong, listen up u hores, blah blah blah, but why? but but but?, batshittery, candy!, controversy, dude, i h8 u all, i want a red rider bb gun, shouldn't i be doing schoolwork?, i need nappy time, i'm on my meds i promise, plea for shinies, where is your god now, are you going to shut up?, u all r h0rz, cry because of you, attention whore, are we there yet?, are you stupid?, death of love, cry me a river, teh gehi made me do it, can't keep it in the pants, candy!!!, barn yard fun, big poopy heads, crying at night, logic has no place here, the path to salvation, sit on my lap little boy, spelln iz 4 lozers, i hate my vagina, air head, but why is the rum gone, ur going 2 hell 4 dat, craptastic, spllinz 4 nerdz, i hate all, but stop it, cutting my wrists, goodbye cruel world, crying in my pillow, i return like firy thing from the ashes, true love, well who pissed in your cheerios?, yaoi is teh evol, what huh? i don't speak stupid, whine bitch moan, can't take this crap, but what are your thoughts on yaoi?

Comments 116

cybersky April 28 2007, 21:02:37 UTC

Pfffffffahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahhaha! How obvious is it you don't know a damn thing about Shigi?! Hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!

I think everything else wrong with this fic goes without saying: bad punctuation, OOCness, lousy sex scene, self-insertion, pointless Takiko-bashing... e.e

ilovebishies April 28 2007, 21:40:37 UTC

waaaaaaaaaaaaaah i said no flames and what do you mean i dont know anything about shigi i hope youre not another of those liars

hottchix4eva April 28 2007, 21:06:08 UTC

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA OMG U SUX SO HARD AT RITING LEMONS U CANT EVEN SAY TEH WORDS FOR TEH NAUGHTY BITS OMG UR SOOOO ST00PID!!!!!!! AND SHIGIS A PUSSY!!!!!!

ilovebishies April 28 2007, 21:41:41 UTC

stop that its my first lemon waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah i hate you so much

hottchix4eva April 28 2007, 22:18:01 UTC

*drops frogs on ur head*

princessawesome April 28 2007, 21:09:15 UTC

This doesn't deserve to be called a lemon or even a fanfic. This is a pile of shit, and you deserved to be flamed and trashed for writing it. If you can't even say the words "penis" and "vagina or write a sex scene with the right amount of details (sex does not last for hours and if you had enough brains in your fucking head you would know!), don't bother. Get off the internet, go back to sex ed class, and actually fucking pay attention this time instead of drawing little hearts and flowers and licking posters of Nakago while the teacher's talking. You're a fucking disgrace, gimme back the 5 seconds I wasted reading this piece of goddamn shit. Talentless whore.

ilovebishies April 28 2007, 21:42:16 UTC

*just stands there and BAWLS*

princessawesome April 28 2007, 21:50:42 UTC

See? Get off the internet, crybaby, you don't belong here.

bb_cc_gal April 28 2007, 21:51:31 UTC

*groans* Let he be, Missy, she's way too weak for you, anyway.

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sarajayechan April 28 2007, 21:09:51 UTC

...Wow. That was special. XD

ilovebishies April 28 2007, 21:14:34 UTC

really thank you so much

sarajayechan April 28 2007, 21:15:11 UTC

I didn't mean it in a good way, kid. XD

cybersky April 28 2007, 21:15:32 UTC

... way to miss the sarcasm, Lucy.

[Eek, Shipwar's made it to Fandom!Secrets... @.@]

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lolgaypuppies April 28 2007, 21:10:20 UTC

*DIES LAUGHING* OMG EVEN I WENT INTO MORE DETAIL IN MY FIRST LEMON AND I SUCK AT PR0N!!!!

ilovebishies April 28 2007, 21:47:53 UTC

dont laugh at my story its not supposed to be funny its beautiful and serious

lolgaypuppies April 28 2007, 21:50:02 UTC

U SUCK AT THIS!!!!!!!