Oh, the first one. So Miro in every way, and the part where he looks at Ivan - I can't describe it in words. It's very emotional for me, as a Bremen, Miro and K.und.K. supporter to read it...you definitely did justice with that one.
'Transience' was a little stilted, but it's alright overall. I'm of the opinion that Ivan would ask more; enquire more about the sudden transfer, but I too am not sure of whether he'd do such a thing, given the conditions [as he hadn't been training with the team for so long, the bond between him and Miro may not have been as strong as it was previously]...all the same, more conversation would have been nice. =]
It was inspired by his first game back at Bremen.. remember we were talking about how Spitz and a few others seemed ok with him now, and how Frings was being an idiot still? and I'm glad the emotions came across for you.
I didn't dare to write too much conversation, because I don't know how either of them would interact with each other, and being grown-up men, they might not be so.. communicative. (boys say very little already as it is ><)
I have no idea what made me write the last one, cos I know NOTHING abotu Serie A and I don't care about it at all. But I was trying to make sure I submitted the max 10 drabbles for Bayern that week (and we won!) so I had to do something. (the things I do for my team)
I understand. Though I do think Ivan's a little on the talkative side still, but then again, given the tone of their conversation...ah, it doesn't matter anyway. It's fine as it is, considering everything. ><
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Oh, the first one. So Miro in every way, and the part where he looks at Ivan - I can't describe it in words. It's very emotional for me, as a Bremen, Miro and K.und.K. supporter to read it...you definitely did justice with that one.
'Transience' was a little stilted, but it's alright overall. I'm of the opinion that Ivan would ask more; enquire more about the sudden transfer, but I too am not sure of whether he'd do such a thing, given the conditions [as he hadn't been training with the team for so long, the bond between him and Miro may not have been as strong as it was previously]...all the same, more conversation would have been nice. =]
I have no comment about the last, sorry. =]
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I didn't dare to write too much conversation, because I don't know how either of them would interact with each other, and being grown-up men, they might not be so.. communicative. (boys say very little already as it is ><)
I have no idea what made me write the last one, cos I know NOTHING abotu Serie A and I don't care about it at all. But I was trying to make sure I submitted the max 10 drabbles for Bayern that week (and we won!) so I had to do something. (the things I do for my team)
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I understand. Though I do think Ivan's a little on the talkative side still, but then again, given the tone of their conversation...ah, it doesn't matter anyway. It's fine as it is, considering everything. ><
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