DCU Fanfic: Coincidence

[shiny_glor_chan]

Title: Coincidence
Fandom: DCU
Character(s): Kyle Rayner, Connor Hawke
Pairing(s): Connor/Kyle
Word Count: 599
Genre: general/romance
Rating: PG/K+
Notes: Written for pervyficgirl at my DCU Kissing Meme. The prompt was apologies, though it went a little awry. I planned for apologies for Kyle being off-planet when Connor got hurt, but no dice. It turned out

Comments

[saavikam77]

Awwwww!!! I felt so bad for Connor reading that arc in the comics. It would be so awesome for him to have Kyle by his side, offering support and understanding. :)

Just perfect.

[shiny_glor_chan]

Too bad canon sucks and won't even get Kyle back on Earth, let alone get them to hang out. :/ Thank you for reading, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[d_moonbeam]

awww, so full of uber-cuteness!!!

[shiny_glor_chan]

Hehe, thank you. Glad you liked it.

[nalanzu]

I keep wondering why it is that we never see any interaction between Kyle and Connor any more. It would be nice if it went something like this. :D

(You have some random bits of grammatical oddness in there, by the way. Would you mind terribly if I fixed them? ^^;; )

[shiny_glor_chan]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, even with my grammatical oddness. I don't have a beta (and this was pretty much a commentbox fic, so I didn't really check it over), so if you want to fic them, go ahead! I'd appreciated it. ^-^

[nalanzu]

Yay~! Let me reiterate - I liked this piece. Short and sweet. <3

OA had been crazy as of late, but after hearing speeches on love and the such from the Star Sapphire, he wanted to come home to visit people he loved.

That middle bit should be "on love and such"; no article needed.
“Ah, sorry, I wasn't...” Kyle trailed off when he saw who he ran into. “Connor!”

This one should be something like "when he saw who had bumped/hit/etc". Into is a preposition and shouldn't be at the end of a sentence; if you wanted to keep the words "run into", it would go "when he saw into whom he had run". It's a bit of an unwieldy sentence.

He had been off-planet so long, but could Connor of changed so much that Kyle barely recognized him? The question ran through Kyle's mind until they made inside Connor's apartment.

There are two things here - the first should be "could Connor have changed so much" and the second is "until they made it inside Connor's apartment."

“...the funny thing is now I can't even hit a target,” Connor paused.While I

[shiny_glor_chan]

Thanks! That was quite helpful.

You could also use contractions within the narrative text, although you certainly don't have to.

Heh, I have it drilled into my head from essay writing in English class that contraction outside of quotes is a no-no. I try to keep with that, usually. Sometimes, i just say screw since it wouldn't work with some characters (like Superboy, for example).

Some of these were such silly mistakes. @_@ Thanks again for pointing 'em out! <3

[porntestpilot]

Wait, so Connor is awake now in canon?

This was sweet! It's too bad Connor can't come visit Oa, like Ice did.

[shiny_glor_chan]

Yup, he's been awake for while. Him and Mia have both left Ollie and Dinah (Connor to 'find himself' while Mia went to England after a hot Brit to get some action, though she hadn't meant to say that to Ollie and Dinah, lol). Thanks for reading!