Take this as just a rough outline, I tend to construct overly detailed scenarions.
The case is closed, the murderess is about to be carted off, the good guys won... and suddenly the girl flips out and lashes out and almost kills John.
Sherlock goes spare and demonstrates that the diagnosis of sociopath is right by having to be physically restrained by a shitload of policemen from more or less vivisecting the murderess where she stands.
For some reason, Lestrade and co. are a tad horrified at seeing this level of murderous rage (esp. against a girl) and having Mycroft appearing from thin air to collect his brother all bland and nonchalant doesn't really appease their worries.
Basically: protective instinct goes wild + Sherlock freaks people out in a sudden display of violence + "OMG it runs in the family!"
I know it's a bit specific but I'd really like to see it, even just some part of it. Pretty please?
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anonymous
August 19 2010, 20:38:10 UTC
Dear God in Heaven, I will have a firstborn just so I can give it to you if only you could eventually expand on this, because this is excatly what I had in mind (I'm the original prompter, btw).
In any case, well done.
Not the sight of her bowels leaking over the street after Sherlock Holmes had leaped to kill her. Not even the frantic struggle to restrain a consulting detective gone mad avoding the little but effective pocket knife he was holding. No. What he remembered mostly was Donovan voice, barely restrained, and her hand pressing her mounth while she looked, wide-eyed, at Sherlock Holmes' face. He himself avoided to look at it. He wasn't sure he would like what he was certain he would see.
<3 <3 <3 :D :D :D
THIS. JUST THIS.
Really, if firstborns are not your currency of choice I'm sure we can come to an agreement about something else.
^__^ I am very glad you liked this :D the only problem with expanding (and really, writing any kind of longer fiction) is that I am Italian and I don't have a beta :(
Firstborns aside, I completely agree with the anon prompter: this was awesome!
For some strange reason, Donovan being discombobulated at that sight instead of going "I was right!" really gives you the sense of barely averted carnage. Not to mention older and wiser Lestrade refusing to look.
Sure you want to leave it at this? It has great potential!
Re: Minifill goddam_ninjaAugust 20 2010, 00:24:00 UTC
I don't really know how the whole beta thing works, really. But, if it's grammar/spelling stuff you're worried about, I would be more then happy to beta for you. ... ... ...(yeah. I really want a sequel. Or prequel. Or anything at all, really. Please?)
[ fill ] the sociopath immerges. unresolvedAugust 31 2010, 15:34:01 UTC
There's something intensely satisfying about solving an impossible puzzle. It's settled comfortably on his chest, and whilst he doesn't necessarily feel much of anything, he can, at the very least, imagine what it might feel like, and he imagines that it's like this. Warm prideful and egotistical. Worth his time and his patience. Even euphoric.
Still, though, he's on his guard. It's when his eyes meet hers that he knows that something's about to happen, that someones's going to get hurt. It's easy to read body language, it's easy to predict the most likely outcome of her pose and it's easy to tell that she's about to launch her way towards an unsuspecting John, who happens to be giving Sherlock a kind, tired smile. He can see it in her eyes, that rage that she's been holding back, that pure and utter fury and contempt she has for those who've outsmarted her. He wouldn't survive it. John's going to die. Sherlock can see it all in slow motion, the way she disentangles herself from the idiotic police officer and she moves with a
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The case is closed, the murderess is about to be carted off, the good guys won... and suddenly the girl flips out and lashes out and almost kills John.
Sherlock goes spare and demonstrates that the diagnosis of sociopath is right by having to be physically restrained by a shitload of policemen from more or less vivisecting the murderess where she stands.
For some reason, Lestrade and co. are a tad horrified at seeing this level of murderous rage (esp. against a girl) and having Mycroft appearing from thin air to collect his brother all bland and nonchalant doesn't really appease their worries.
Basically: protective instinct goes wild + Sherlock freaks people out in a sudden display of violence + "OMG it runs in the family!"
I know it's a bit specific but I'd really like to see it, even just some part of it. Pretty please?
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In any case, well done.
Not the sight of her bowels leaking over the street after Sherlock Holmes had leaped to kill her. Not even the frantic struggle to restrain a consulting detective gone mad avoding the little but effective pocket knife he was holding. No. What he remembered mostly was Donovan voice, barely restrained, and her hand pressing her mounth while she looked, wide-eyed, at Sherlock Holmes' face.
He himself avoided to look at it. He wasn't sure he would like what he was certain he would see.
<3 <3 <3 :D :D :D
THIS. JUST THIS.
Really, if firstborns are not your currency of choice I'm sure we can come to an agreement about something else.
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For some strange reason, Donovan being discombobulated at that sight instead of going "I was right!" really gives you the sense of barely averted carnage. Not to mention older and wiser Lestrade refusing to look.
Sure you want to leave it at this? It has great potential!
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I don't have a beta :( you can see the loads and loads of error I made here (Sherlock would have killed me XD)
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...(yeah. I really want a sequel. Or prequel. Or anything at all, really. Please?)
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A beta reads the story first and correct it^^ if you are interested, send me a pm :D
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Still, though, he's on his guard. It's when his eyes meet hers that he knows that something's about to happen, that someones's going to get hurt. It's easy to read body language, it's easy to predict the most likely outcome of her pose and it's easy to tell that she's about to launch her way towards an unsuspecting John, who happens to be giving Sherlock a kind, tired smile. He can see it in her eyes, that rage that she's been holding back, that pure and utter fury and contempt she has for those who've outsmarted her. He wouldn't survive it. John's going to die. Sherlock can see it all in slow motion, the way she disentangles herself from the idiotic police officer and she moves with a ( ... )
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