Fourth Annual OC Sentence Fiction Challenge

Sep 16, 2007 10:04


 This is my first year with the challenge and I really enjoyed this - hope you all enjoy my stories.
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fredsmith518 September 18 2007, 21:02:23 UTC
Very sweet Kirsten with Ryan.
Very much like the resolution you provide for the Theresa 'plot' and the interchange between them, “Do you think for one minute that I wouldn’t rather you were Daniel’s father?”

Theresa’s words rang true and Ryan’s anger began to drain away.

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sheelock September 20 2007, 16:47:36 UTC
I really liked that part too - I thought it was always evident that Theresa was deeply in love with Ryan.

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oc_gambit2 September 19 2007, 16:27:35 UTC
Ooooh! They're up. *smile* I only have time for one this morning but will be back soon to the second ( ... )

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sheelock September 20 2007, 16:51:33 UTC
I'm so glad you liked this. I'm a sucker for any Kirsten/Ryan interaction - always wanted more in the show - as you pointed out they were kindred spirits. Thanks for all your comments and input.

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helen_c September 21 2007, 19:14:24 UTC
Yay! Ryan and Kirsten time. And I always like stories that explore Ryan's reaction to that little bombshell... :)

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sheelock September 24 2007, 18:11:52 UTC
They are one of my favorite character interactions also. Glad you like this.

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beachtree October 6 2007, 05:33:35 UTC
You've given more than one gift in this fic since you shine the spotlight on a topic that was booby trapped from the beginning and was butchered after that. The result was ambiguous, frustrating and just hollow and disappointing, but you avoid all of those pitfalls here. You also give us something so rare- and much beloved, especially by me: Ryan/Kirsten interaction with actual connectivity that includes real involvement and engagement on Kirsten's part. That's what Ryan needs to know someone cares and is granting him permission to respond in kind. How I longed to see that sort of exchange and tentative bonding without so much stilted distance and discomfort from Kirsten. I never stopped hoping ( ... )

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sheelock October 8 2007, 17:09:33 UTC
I'm so glad you liked this story - I always wanted more from Ryan and Kirsten's relationship than we got on the show (they were one of my favorite combos - must be the mother in me - Ryan needed lots of mothering). And though I never liked Theresa (or her manipulation of Ryan's feelings), I did appreciate her letting Ryan go.

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beachtree October 8 2007, 18:29:13 UTC
I was desperate for more Ryan/Kirsten interaction and connectivity. Watching them circle one another was so frustrating. They had the largest gap to close with her as the linchpin upon whom his stay was contingent from the beginning. Sadly, we were shown so little progress. I really felt that she erected barriers based on her guilt for judging and rejecting him and then her doubts in terms of letting him get too close, not knowing what role to take and just being intimidated. She let the guardian responsibilities fall in Sandy's lap and kept her distance- which meant Ryan had to respect her parameters and comply. He certainly had to be terrified when he blatantly overstepped and spoke to her at the intervention, and God only knows how long he walked on eggshells afterwards. She seemed to undo any real gains in that one sentence ( ... )

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ctoan December 7 2007, 02:23:10 UTC
That was a really nice Ryan/Kirsten story. I enjoy their interactions. Even though she was longer to come around, she's the one of the Cohens who actually listens to him and doesn't put preconceived expectations on him.

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