Rope's End, Hakkai/Sanzo, NSFW

Sep 22, 2008 20:52

Title: Rope’s End
Author: Sharpeslass
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: 83 (Hakkai/Sanzo)
Summary: Don’t you think Hakkai’s going to be a little angry with Sanzo for leaving them all to fend for themselves?
A/N This could be seen, by the extremely sensitive as non-con. It is NOT non con and if it looks like it, I’ve written it wrong, but I wanted to throw in the ( Read more... )

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illusionary001 September 23 2008, 04:06:53 UTC
This was pretty good! ^_^ I'm not a fan of Hakkai topping, but it worked here. =) And the hate sex was awesome, I loved the detail.

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sharpeslass September 23 2008, 04:37:27 UTC
I'm not a fan of 83 in general. They fought me every step of the way on this, so I'm happy if it even worked just a little! Thanks so much for reading it!

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theskywasblue September 23 2008, 05:14:04 UTC
I don't generally read 83...ever, but because it was you, I made an exception. And I'm so happy I did - this was some awesome NSFW smoot. Loved it.

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sharpeslass September 23 2008, 05:26:00 UTC
Thank you for that. I am, as you know, a big 58er, but wrote this for jedishampoo (it was a trade though, so just wait, there's going to be a 58 coming from her veeery soon!!)

Point is, she totally cautioned me that I would not be getting half as many feedbacks on this as I did on my 58s. So I've steeled myself and am prepared for thundering silence. Because of this, I do extra appreciate you reading. Thank you so much. It was soooo hard to write... Hakkai kept wanting to run away and be with Gojyo. And Sanzo just didn't want to have sex...

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reddwarfer September 23 2008, 05:27:15 UTC
I enjoyed that a lot. Hakkai topping is just the best thing ever. ♥

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sharpeslass September 23 2008, 05:31:04 UTC
The phrase, "Hakkai topping," is a good one. It sounds like it should go on ice cream... Like, "Yummy, I'll have the Hakkai topping!" (I really will!)

Thank you so much for reading this!! It was a real challenge for me to write.

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madammina September 23 2008, 13:13:41 UTC
Please sign me up for the Hakkai topping! In fact......I'll come back for it again and again...lol!

I'm definitely not a fan of this pairing, but you REALLY made it work. You had me chuckling with the "(Sanzo didn’t know quite when he’d done it but he vaguely wished he’d seen it happening). "

That was so very enjoyable early morning Saiyuki smut!

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sharpeslass September 24 2008, 05:14:47 UTC
Thank you so much! It was a real challenge for me, so I'm glad you thought it worked. I really appreciate you reading it even though it isn't your pairing!

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derjmeister September 23 2008, 05:55:49 UTC
I, on the other hand, am a big fan of 83 and Hakkai topping. and tied-up Sanzo I liked the manipulation angle going on in this and the emphasis that yes, these two have major issues. Also this line: “Welcome to the world of rough sex, asshole.” is something I'll be trying to work into everyday conversations for at least a couple of weeks.

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sharpeslass September 24 2008, 05:18:21 UTC
I wish you every success in working that one into conversation. If you manage it, you clearly have more interesting day-to-day chats than I do.
Thank you for reading this, and I'm really glad to know that it worked for an honest to god 83 shipper. (I don't hate this pairing the way some seem to - obviously, or I couldn't have written it at all - I think my only aversion is that 83 = no 85, and I do love the 85. I do wonder why so many people are adamantly opposed to 83. In some ways, it makes as much sense as many other pairings and more sense than a few of them).

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jessiedark September 23 2008, 11:39:13 UTC
OK not a 3/8 fan but wow, excellent fic. You did well. Like Hakkai in control though, whoever he is with.

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sharpeslass September 24 2008, 05:21:15 UTC
Thank you! I felt like Hakkai's control was slipping a little in this. I was trying for a more dominant Hakkai originally, but he wouldn't cooperate for me and I eventually just let him be what he was going to be. It's probably thanks to some early guidance from kansouame that he wasn't weeping and begging Sanzo to take him halfway through the fic (okay, slight exaggeration - I would never have Hakkai weeping. I hate that in fics. If someone is going to cry, they'd better have a damned good reason. These guys are tough!)

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jessiedark September 24 2008, 10:56:18 UTC
THANK YOU. What is it with making one them a girl. And a wossy girl at that. If they were gonna' fall for one another they'd be falling for them as GUYS cause they sure aren't girly in any other way--

So you did good, give yourself a high five, recommend a mirror.

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jessiedark September 24 2008, 10:59:10 UTC
PS I think you can take the dub con out since there's not dubiousness about his consent at the end. We need a warning; "pretend non-con"??? Non-con posser to save face?

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