Nihon: Twofold (2)

[shadow_of_egypt]

Title: Twofold
Characters/Pairings: KuroFai, others mentioned
Rating: M - warnings (and I do so hate giving warnings) for violence, possible (probable) OC death, bad language, and definite citrus content. Possibly (probably) other dark stuff too. *absently tacks that last bit on, just in case*
Summary: To the neighbouring nation of Chugoku Kurogane

Comments

[smoochy_ryoko]

Yay- an update!!!!

I love established couple fics, no matter what fandom, but with Kuro!Fai it is extra nice. You do it so well too... its the little details that make it work so smoothly. I like how it is Kuro how extricates them from dinner when Fai is overwrought. I super enjoyed Kuro kicking everyone out of Fai's room and demanding they show a little respect. The breakfast scene was cute too- Fai getting a bit annoyed with Kuro and pawning off the food he dosen't like.

But most of all- I liked Fai's little fit of pique where he knocks all of the scrolls off the bed and then fusses at Kuro to pick them up ( and Kuro was so sweet about it too). I think this shows just how safe Fai feels around Kurgane to be so real with all masks off.

You tell such a nice story and drop such tantalizing tidbits. Now I am just dying to know more about Fai's summer fever.

Your writing style is so vivid and painterly. I could just see the last scene- everyone tipping over and parosols flying.

Great job- I am looking forward to the next one.

[shadow_of_egypt]

Kurogane's little outburst was less 'show me respect,' and more 'stop pissing me off'. (Though I suppose the two can sometimes be one and the same...) X3

Ahh, Fai's fever is actually supposed to be covered in a oneshot that happens earlier in this series - only...I haven't written it yet. >> *coughs* Please don't throw things at the terrible authoress for writing everything completely out of chronological order. ♥

[smoochy_ryoko]

Hmmm..... to me as a reader, Kurogane's kicking people out of Fai's room and demanding they learn to knock felt like he was demanding other's respect Fai, which was sweet. I also so your point. As for writing out of order, that is fun too!

[batzypan]

OHMYGAH Yelan as in mama-Li?!

Your post-series fics are probably my favorites of yours, and this one turning out so great! I want to know what you are going to do with the twins >

[shadow_of_egypt]

That's right~ *dumps cookies and love on your head* (Though she's shown up in my post-eries work before and I snuck her past you all. =w=)

I'm very glad you enjoy this little fanon then - it's fun to play about in. ^^

[yellow_kettle]

Oho! I wonder where this conversation is gonna go~

Anyway, I'd just like to say that this is one lovely fic and I love the idea for it and ALL THOSE possibilities. <3 You're a great writer and every part of this fic is handled well. It's also very captivating and I must say you definitely know how to grab your readers' attention. I absolutely adore your interpretation and portrayal of Kuro and Fai, and their interactions with your OCs are as enjoyable to read as their ones with each other

[shadow_of_egypt]

Truthfully, I can't even remember what the guy's name means right now (it's in my notes upstairs somewhere), but I combined 'shizko' ('shi' and 'ko' already combined) with 'mo(u)to' for the name, and there wasn't a 'u' in the spelling I took it from. Although you're right; it would probably make a lot more sense to have it there. Research, you fail me. T_T

And, eee, thank you for the love? ♥ I actually dislike using OCs in something that might be a main role but found using them necessary here - I can only stretch CLAMP's given characters so far, however many of them there are. ;-;
I'm glad you like the plot/characters/setting(s), and just...general ♥♥&hearts at you for your nice words? *fails so badly with personal eloquence, aha ^^;;;*

[yellow_kettle]

Teehee, that 'notes upstairs' made me giggle. :3

About the OCs, I know what you mean. I think you've pulled them off, too. XD They do the things they're supposed to do and unlike most OCs, they're not awkward or 2D or anything. And again, unlike in some fics it doesn't feel like they're imposing or just being a general nuisance which is awesome. XD

<3

[shadow_of_egypt]

I leave notes all over the house - *is terrible*. Most of them are incomprehensible to anyone but me, scribbled on napkins, paper, post-its...whatever's to hand when something strikes my fancy. *is a magpie for information, yup*

[yuui_nyanko]

I love this so much. SO MUCH ASKLJLJFDS;HFOA /spaz

I think every little plot point I adored has already been said over 9000 times by other readers, so I'm sorry if I sound repetitive...

I love that Kurogane and Fay are in an established relationship - and you write them amazingly! They are perfectly in character and you can //feel// the caring that Kurogane has for Fay.

I love that the twins are there. Sorry to say this, but I vote kidnap too. Or at least some kind of Fay-adoption. I can't see him being able to leave them behind.

The scenery and descriptions are amazing, the characterisation is perfect ((even the OCs - you don't see THAT much!)) and I'm really really looking forward to reading more.

[shadow_of_egypt]

♥ I treasure any comment regardless? *fails so very much at leaving comments, so knows your paaain*

I'm glad you're enjoying the story/character interaction, and I've noted you on the list of 'fiends to be kept away from adorable bishie children'. ^_~

Have a happy New Year! (Sorry, for the brevity - *is dashing out to a party tonight*)

[shadow_of_egypt]

I'm not sure whether to sparkle at you or pout at you. *laughs* Some of what you were 'thinking about' ranges pretty close to the plot for this fic - as well as other oneshots in the series -, and really, I should feel thwarted. *has been sussed, but since it's by you~~~♥* Forgive me for not going into it in too much detail, please - I want to cover some of it in this and later fic. ^^;

...If we're assuming a Kurogane is a Yuui(any Yuui)'s soulmate, and that every world has a version of every person at some point in time, our!Fai - Yuui of Valeria - really does have the most terrible luck. If we're assuming his 'rightful' Kurogane existed in Valeria at some point - he's dead. If we also assume there was a Kurogane in the world Celes was in - he's dead. (Although, in that case, there's also the interesting question of just where exactly the original Fai and Yuui of Celes are.) Fai, in effect, is forced to steal from another world's Yuui, infringing upon space that wasn't really his. (But has become so