Nihon: Twofold (2)

[shadow_of_egypt]

Title: Twofold
Characters/Pairings: KuroFai, others mentioned
Rating: M - warnings (and I do so hate giving warnings) for violence, possible (probable) OC death, bad language, and definite citrus content. Possibly (probably) other dark stuff too. *absently tacks that last bit on, just in case*
Summary: To the neighbouring nation of Chugoku Kurogane

Comments

[yellow_kettle]

Oho! I wonder where this conversation is gonna go~

Anyway, I'd just like to say that this is one lovely fic and I love the idea for it and ALL THOSE possibilities. <3 You're a great writer and every part of this fic is handled well. It's also very captivating and I must say you definitely know how to grab your readers' attention. I absolutely adore your interpretation and portrayal of Kuro and Fai, and their interactions with your OCs are as enjoyable to read as their ones with each other.
Also, I usually don't read fics with already established relationships because they tend to be boring and full of everyday life repetitiveness but the story and setting in this are the perfect base for further developments in Kurogane and Fai's relationship/for interesting convos between them. :D
I really really admire the fact that you've done your homework. XD It's awesome that you've researched things and it definitely shows that you've put effort into this. Really, this fic is just super new and fresh and very original. It's great to see such works. <3

tl;dr: I LOVE YOU.

Anyway, I'm not sure how to say this without sounding like a weeaboo, but it's a little strange that there's no 'u' after the 'z' in Shizkomoto since the Japanese are all syllables when it comes to spelling. Just saying. >_>

[shadow_of_egypt]

Truthfully, I can't even remember what the guy's name means right now (it's in my notes upstairs somewhere), but I combined 'shizko' ('shi' and 'ko' already combined) with 'mo(u)to' for the name, and there wasn't a 'u' in the spelling I took it from. Although you're right; it would probably make a lot more sense to have it there. Research, you fail me. T_T

And, eee, thank you for the love? ♥ I actually dislike using OCs in something that might be a main role but found using them necessary here - I can only stretch CLAMP's given characters so far, however many of them there are. ;-;
I'm glad you like the plot/characters/setting(s), and just...general ♥♥&hearts at you for your nice words? *fails so badly with personal eloquence, aha ^^;;;*

[yellow_kettle]

Teehee, that 'notes upstairs' made me giggle. :3

About the OCs, I know what you mean. I think you've pulled them off, too. XD They do the things they're supposed to do and unlike most OCs, they're not awkward or 2D or anything. And again, unlike in some fics it doesn't feel like they're imposing or just being a general nuisance which is awesome. XD

<3

[shadow_of_egypt]

I leave notes all over the house - *is terrible*. Most of them are incomprehensible to anyone but me, scribbled on napkins, paper, post-its...whatever's to hand when something strikes my fancy. *is a magpie for information, yup*