Days of the Dead: The Second Day (Plantarum), by Sophonisba [first aid challenge]

[saphanibaal]

-title- Days of the Dead: The Second Day (Plantarum)
-author- Sophonisba (saphanibaal)
-ratings/warnings- Non-explicit het sex; reference to large difference in ages therein; some past Ronon/Melena. Spelling/orthographic variations denoting mishearings or misunderstandings. Part of my pet asymptotic-to-canon AU.
-timeframe- Shortly before "Aurora."
-spoilers

Comments

[lillian13]

Ronon's POV is very good--alien without "alien", if you get my drift. His backstory (especially the bits about the aftereffects of the jerkey) was believeable and it fit, and is infinitely more than the TPTB will ever give us. Making Rodney a distant relative of House cracked me up! And Ronon promising to help Miko kill her uncle's killer...having Ronon and Charin together was brilliant, and Teyla's reaction was great.

Another great entry!

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[saphanibaal]

I'm glad my Ronon-voice worked for you; I'm still feeling my way into the character (which process, unsurprisingly, partly consists of coming up with a background for him: much of which was made up out of whole cloth, but the jerky-and-aftermath owes something to my own male relations ^_^ ).

//Making Rodney a distant relative of House cracked me up!//

I have, oh, five or six "these characters are linked in this way" crossover filing cards in my own deuterocanon, so it was fun to actually be able to show this one in text for a change. (And this one just fits.)

//And Ronon promising to help Miko kill her uncle's killer...//

Which is both a window into Ronon and a case of missed point like whoa... the justice Miko really wants at this point isn't vengeance but acknowledgment, for it to be known that yes, Kuroba Touichi WAS murdered and for people to agree that his family should have claimed as much in public rather than hid it like a dirty little secret. (You can probably tell that this is one of the two foundations of my personal

[mary_alice]

Another wonderful piece of world-building. I do so love the glimpses your universe gives us into the lives of the ordinary folk of Pegasus. Your alien worlds are just that, simultaneously both very alien and very familiar. Thanks for posting this!

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[saphanibaal]

Thank you very much for your kind comments: I love imagining up worlds and cultures, so it's always nice to hear that they worked. ^_^

[eliyes]

Dr. Kusanagi entered in a way suggesting that she'd opened the door with her elbow, juggling a long thin packet, two eating-sticks, a bowl heaped high with white rice grains, a low pottery dish, and a small plastic device.

It's not a Atlantis-regular sliding door?

[saphanibaal]

Don't those console things next to the doors control their sliding open and shut? I think I remember seeing someone raise their hand to one at some point, although I can't remember exactly what they did and therefore how believable it would be to use an elbow instead (simple pressure, yes; more complicated button-pushing, more difficult but not impossible).

[eliyes]

Aha! I suppose I've fallen into the habit of believing the fanon that people with the ATA gene can just get the doors to open with their minds, in addition to turning on lights and such. Also, the description had me picturing a swinging door like what I have in my house. Sorry.

A very interesting chapter! Nice to see a bit more of everyone involved's histories. How many Days of the Dead do Satedans celebrate?

(Oh, and how many Wraith should there be in Teyla's story? You said "it was only two Wraith, on foot" and then "And then the other two Wraith ran away", so were there three Wraith?)