Comments | sga_flashfic: Cocytus by <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/murron">murron</a></strong> and <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/eretria">eretria</a></strong> [Dark Side challenge]

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Cocytus by murron and eretria [Dark Side challenge]

Jul 26, 2006 21:26

Title: Cocytus
Authors: eretria & murron
Genre: Gen (Team)
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Not ours, not profiting, written for entertainment purposes only.
Summary: They cry for those who have no one left to cry for them.
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author: murron, challenge: dark side, author: eretria

Comments 89

in_interval July 26 2006, 22:07:05 UTC

The first horror novel I picked up as a child had the victim paralyzed but still able to see and hear what the villains around her were doing. I stopped reading horror novels after that since I was afraid to go to sleep for around a week. I wish I could remember the name of the book, particularly after being so vividly reminded of it.

That is to say, I found this profoundly creepy. I loved the the individual team members reactions - it was fascinating to see the same event through such different perceptions. I loved how Ronon and Teyla built on the other's descriptions. Thanks - I'll remember this one for a long time (without the nightmares, I hope).

murron July 27 2006, 07:08:22 UTC

I certainly hope you won't have any nightmares. Creepy is good (sometimes), but it shouldn't last too long.

I'm thrilled to hear the individual reactions worked for you. I always find it challenging to write the whole team - switching between the four heads, so to speak.

The idea of being paralyzed but still lucid is one of my anxieties, as well. So, well, writing this has been an interesting experience.

Thank you for taking the time to let us know you liked the story!

flatlanddan July 26 2006, 22:32:23 UTC

Wowsers. The ending is just so haunting. The idea of them maybe not making it...

Very, very well done.

murron July 27 2006, 07:09:30 UTC

Thank you! We had various endings actually, but then decided to keep it open like it is. It seemed to fit the atmosphere.

teand July 27 2006, 00:08:29 UTC

An evocative use of less-is-more... we don't have to see because they do.

She was looking up now, her body a dark silhouette, fraying out on the edges against the diffuse sunlight. John was inappropriately reminded of Lot’s wife.

Great line!

murron July 27 2006, 15:10:24 UTC

Thank you!! The Lot reference was eretria - who knows all the good quotes from the Bible.

skeddy_kat July 27 2006, 00:21:46 UTC

This was eerie and haunting. I'm convincing myself they make it to the gate.

murron July 27 2006, 15:15:02 UTC

Thank you, we were hoping for eerie. The idea haunted us, too. In the end we decided to discuss the plot in daylight only.

amothea July 27 2006, 00:42:13 UTC

this was good. :)

murron July 27 2006, 15:15:16 UTC

Thank you!