Title: Cocytus Authors: eretria & murron Genre: Gen (Team) Rating: PG-13 Disclaimer: Not ours, not profiting, written for entertainment purposes only. Summary: They cry for those who have no one left to cry for them. ( addition )
That was amazing. Beautiful and haunting. I loved how you parallelled Teyla and Ronon's knowledge of this with John's past in Afghanistan and Biblical references. Each of them bring their own history with them to a place like this.
The descriptions were vivid. I had never thought about a planet like this before but now that you've written it, it seems inevitable. And so fitting that the graveyard in Pegasus is an open one, that death would be so much a part of life in this galaxy that the Lamenters don't try to hide it.
It was intriguing to tackle the issue from four sides - we had a good time devising the four POVs in the beginning. I'm glad the mingling of their backgrounds worked for you.
The planet was an idea eretria had while picking up fallen plums. Imagine that :).
Normally, I love the stories that come out of the flashfic challenges. I'm not sure what happened. It seems this is a bad time for this challenge. Everyone is so dissatisfied and disgusted that most of the authors I read reguallary aren't writing. That being said, there have been a few gems. Shushu's story, and this one stand out. This was very good, in a kind of awful way, if that makes any sense. The endless corpses... I, of course, had just finished a story about post-nuclear war America so was in a dark mood to start with. Very nice.
This was very good, in a kind of awful way, if that makes any sense. Let me tell you, the writing process was equally ambiguous: very intriguing and very, very creepy. So yes, it makes sense.
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Well done.
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The descriptions were vivid. I had never thought about a planet like this before but now that you've written it, it seems inevitable. And so fitting that the graveyard in Pegasus is an open one, that death would be so much a part of life in this galaxy that the Lamenters don't try to hide it.
Beautiful.
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The planet was an idea eretria had while picking up fallen plums. Imagine that :).
Thank you for a detailed and thoughtful comment.
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Thank you - both for the kind feedback & the pre-post help.
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This was very good, in a kind of awful way, if that makes any sense.
Let me tell you, the writing process was equally ambiguous: very intriguing and very, very creepy. So yes, it makes sense.
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