Mythical II - Defloration by Zoë Rayne (virgin challenge)

[z_rayne]

Title: Defloration
Series: sequel to Mythical
Pairing: Sheppard/McKay
Rating: NC-17
Word count: ~6400 (I fail at the "flash" portion of flashfic)
Beta: Rachael Sabotini (wickedwords), who was kind enough to look over the not-quite-finished draft, so if there are any mistakes in here I probably inserted them after she'd finished with it

Summary: "It's

Comments

[amothea]

I really liked this. :)

[z_rayne]

Thanks!

[iibnf]

That was sweet - I do like it when people remember that sex is inherently pretty silly and can have a laugh about it.

[z_rayne]

Thanks; I'm glad you liked it!

[lavvyan]

"He touched something, in one of the labs. It reset his virginity."

*laughing tears* oh, those wacky ancients!

and this:

some part of him determined to eventually live up to McKay's expectations.

too cute! i love how you handled the not-quite-but-now-again-first time experience for john.

this story is great, thank you so much for posting! it made my day that much better. :)

oh, and btw, this? John sucked his way back up and pulled off. "You want to come on my face or in my mouth?"

whoa. *squirms*

[z_rayne]

I'm glad you liked it.

John's obviously been watching too much porn in lieu of having actual memories of sex. *g*

[anitac588]

Hot!
He touched something, in one of the labs. It reset his virginity. Nice idea, kinky those Ancients, making them having multiple firsttimes. *g*

[z_rayne]

Thanks!

[kimberlite]

"I've seen you fly; I think that's a pretty good parallel to sex. You're cocky, but justifiably so. Good with your hands. Focused. Intense."

Guh -- very hot and nicely emotional 'first' time.

[z_rayne]

Thank you! I'm glad it worked for you.