Strange Attractors by Zoe Rayne (slave challenge)

[z_rayne]

Title: Strange Attractors
Pairing: Sheppard/McKay
Rating: NC-17
Challenge: sga_flashfic - slave challenge

Summary: Of all the things he'd wanted but been sure he'd never get, John Sheppard was at the top of the list.

A/N: This is a darker take on the scenario I wrote in Icing on the Cake. You should probably read Icing first, if only so the set-up makes

Comments

[lovessong]

Wow. Ouch, and wow.

Heartbreaking, and hopeful, and just wonderful.

I have to say I enjoyed the first version, and it certainly left me with more of a warm fuzzy feeling -- but this is a much more powerful story, which I suspect will stay with me in ways the other version won't.

[z_rayne]

It's always incredible to be told that your work has affected your readers; thank you so much for your comments.

[sor_bet]

What you said. Exactly.

[z_rayne]

*blush*

Thank you so much; I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[forcryinoutloud]

Wow! I just don't know what else to say but wow!

It was dark and angsty and creepy and...Wow!

My heart broke for Rodney :( *sniffles* You should SO write a sequel to this to FIX them *sobs*

[z_rayne]

Thank you so much.

You should SO write a sequel to this to FIX them *sobs*

You know, it kills me to say this, but I'm not sure they can be fixed. I wanted so bad to write the fix-it ending, but cathexys was absolutely right, I think, in saying that wouldn't be true; they're both a little too broken for it to be okay any time soon. And honestly? I hurt right along with you, because I'm apparently very invested in happy endings John and Rodney.

[forcryinoutloud]

*sigh* I know--it's definitely not something that is fixable any time soon *cries* but GOD it's just so painful :( *sniffles* It was very well written!!! But...*clings to John and Rodney*

[_inbetween_]

Not fixed in the short run, of course, but ... not fixed at all??? Do you both agree on that?

[kageygirl]

Oh, god. Ouch. That was real enough to cut deep.

And though that knowledge didn't completely wash away his anger, it made him realize that McKay was only human, and it made him wonder how he would have reacted in the same situation.

Oh, but it had to go that badly, just so that I'd be that relieved when John realized they'd both screwed up, and decided he'd try to really fix it.

Ooh, pain. But good pain, cleansing pain, healing-kind-of-pain. Whew.

[z_rayne]

Ooh, pain. But good pain, cleansing pain, healing-kind-of-pain. Whew.

Yeah, it was just a little bit with the pain, wasn't it? *g* Now imagine that in my head for the last week...yeah.

[ficklememeer]

Oh my gosh. This was sooooo soooooooo powerful! I'm near tears here. Beautifully written, my dear. And I echo forcryinoutloud's statement. This is begging for a sequel!

[z_rayne]

*hands you a hankie* Thank you so much.

I'm lousy at sequels (and I'm not sure John and Rodney can be easily fixed after this, either), but I have no problem with someone else writing a continuation.

[ficklememeer]

*pout* I'll bake you cookies... *wink*

[fenris_wolf0]

I agree. This cannot be fixed overnight: I can see the recovery from victims to friends taking years and lovers? Maybe never.

Still, I would love to see a continuation -in character- that did not ignore what happened. It could take hundreds of pages! Logically it should take at least 300-500 pages. :D

(Note that sadistic readers like me do not mind overlong fics especially with built-in ansgt and emotional engagement: no sex needed as long as the protagonists suffer beautifully and realistically... )

[teaphile]

When I read the first story I wondered what would happen in this situation. I think you played it out very well.

I'm not sure I could see them becoming lovers after this without a lot of work, but you worked the emotional revelations so well that I can see them being friends again.

[z_rayne]

you worked the emotional revelations so well that I can see them being friends again.

I'm glad it worked for you. This was probably the hardest thing I've ever written; by the time I finished I was absolutely drained.

Thanks.