Rites and Passage - part 3

[randomfreshink]

Title: Rites and Passage - Part 3
Rating/Warning: PG-13 for some language, gen
Spoilers: References Stargate (the movie), COTG, Enemy Within
Author:  randomfreshink
Recipient:   settiai
Request details: The very first mission-gone-wrong where SG-1 (who are still barely strangers) have to work together as a team in order to survive.
Didn't Want: AU. Any

Comments

[stargazercmc]

Early teamfic = awesome. Thanks so much for letting us get a glimpse of this time period. I wish we would have seem more of that teambuilding phase on the show.

[randomfreshink]

Yeah, it would have been fun to have more early stuff, but I can see why they had to jump ahead to team formed. They really needed to keep the action going, and hey, this is what fanfics for right?

[eve11]

It's now 2am and I have to be up in less than four hours, but it was totally worth it.

I love love love your narrative style. There is such an ease to your story-telling, and to how you capture everyone's voices. Just fantastic.

Teal'c glanced at him, his head tipped, and Daniel wondered if he was getting this condescending courtesy because Teal'c thought non-warrior types needed to be indulged because of their inadequacies. But, then, Teal'c gave this kind of courtesy to Sam, and to the general, so maybe it was just his way of being nice.

This made me laugh so much.

Also, Daniel's early inability to grasp the concept of a team rang really true. I loved this part: You go--we go. You stay--we stay. He didn't think that was actually practical or possible, but it was a good sentiment. And him arguing, two things vs. one thing. Also, Teal'c only got one POV but it was bloody brilliant.

[randomfreshink]

You can thank Fignewton for the Teal'c pov -- I wasn't sure if I needed it, so I left it for her call, and she said it had to be there....so.....

(Has Daniel ever really grasped the idea of 'team'? I think he sort of gets it, but even with The Shroud, he's like, 'well I'll go off and do all this dangerous stuff and you guys just stay here.')

And thanks so much...I don't think there's a better compliment than a story keeping someone up.

[aurora_novarum]

Oh definitely needed Teal'c's POV too. It made it a complete team building. Aw!

It was really nice to see all their self evalutations and evaluations of each other and working through the puzzles and being there emotionally for each other even when they didn't really know each other!

I also liked how you explained that difference between the Stargate movie canon and the tv series canon. Very nice.

[maychorian]

So fantastic. Loved all of the little character bits, and the POVs were just right. Yes, you definitely needed the Teal'c POV!

So many details were just lovely and perfect and right, so right. Like Sam and Daniel with their "trading cards" and Daniel not getting what a team is, and Teal'c and Jack both thinking that they need to teach each other a code, and yeah, four is a lucky number.

Super wonderful stuff.

[randomfreshink]

Yeah, I think FigNewton came up with by a couple years down the line, the hand signals SG-1 has are unique to them. Which has got to the case, between Teal'c bringing his stuff, then the military stuff, and Daniel's own unique hand signals.

[tresa_cho]

Guh. That was absolutely amazing. Very, very well done, you hit their characters spot on. *loves*

[randomfreshink]

thanks! :)