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hellzz_on_earth September 18 2015, 06:46:32 UTC
You certainly know how to shut me up. lol
I so wanted Chloe to stay in Star City, but Ollie and the guys moving back to Metropolis is even better!!!
I realize Chloe has to work through her issues and to do that she can't run away. So I'm good with her going home, now. lol
I loved how towards the end Chlollie had dual epiphanies. There's more to their feelings. It's a small step, but a good step too.
Now I can't wait for that first team meeting.
Wonder what Clark is going to think?
Thanks for the awesome update as always.
Happy writing.

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serafina19 September 27 2015, 15:37:00 UTC
That wasn't my intention, but I'm glad you liked my approach to things. In a way, I wanted to have a canon-ish feel with the team coming back, but I thought it also fit who Chloe is as a person.

It is a small step, that's all it can be for now.

Hopefully you enjoy the conclusion, but you won't see Clark in it. Lois, on the other hand, does make an appearance.

Thanks :)

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teamolicity123 September 18 2015, 06:47:22 UTC

Aww the Chloe/Oliver chat was very cute :) Can't wait for next chapter.

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serafina19 September 27 2015, 15:37:34 UTC
Thanks! I hope to finish this soon.

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noellesullivan September 19 2015, 13:38:48 UTC
Oliver is adorable...
I really prefer your version of Smallville.

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serafina19 September 27 2015, 15:38:06 UTC
He sure can be at times. I'm thrilled you're enjoying this that much. Thanks for the lovely feedback.

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liferscove2118 September 19 2015, 18:23:44 UTC
I love what you have posted.

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serafina19 September 27 2015, 15:38:20 UTC
Thanks!

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scout09 September 20 2015, 14:23:24 UTC
I love that Chloe just barges in to the apartment and lays it all on the line. Oliver strikes me as one who appreciates when one cuts to the chase (probably comes in handy being a CEO) and Chloe knows this. Add that to bottling up her recent mistakes and bursting at the seams to let it out and you have this full-blown confession happening. It's refreshing and almost cathartic to have her not beat around the bush.

That didn’t sound right either. I don't know if you've just started doing it recently, or if I'm just now starting to notice, but there's been this really cool thing in your writing lately of letting your characters talk through their feelings and ideas. As I've said before, we don't come to a conversation with a script in our hands and sometimes say things we don't mean. Countless times my husband has asked me what's wrong and I didn't have an answer for him right away because I'd been avoiding thinking about the problem so much that I didn't have words to describe it. This is a neat writing trick to have in your pocket ( ... )

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serafina19 September 27 2015, 15:48:27 UTC
I agree regarding Oliver, but I think Chloe's that way too, even without the bottling up. She knows how he is, she knows why she's at Oliver's and doesn't want to waste his time. I thought about adding small talk, but it never worked ( ... )

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