Comments | selkie_queen: The Night's Truth

selkie_queen

The Night's Truth

Jun 06, 2010 02:29

Comments 8

vyvyan_wilde June 6 2010, 22:26:41 UTC

This had a sort of folk tale feeling to it which I really enjoyed. It was engaging, fast-paced, and I felt a real connection to the characters, especially Tanvi. Her death really shocked me; it was a bold move to build her up, give her such a rich personality and history, then kill her. Bold, but good. I'm glad Amalesh got his comeuppance in the end and that Tanvi will be remembered through the blooming jasmines.

selkie_queen June 6 2010, 22:33:48 UTC

Thank you so much, I was very worried that I made the story too fast paced. I'm relieved you got the folk tale/myth feel I was trying to put into the story.

keppiehed June 6 2010, 22:56:08 UTC

Hello! I'm one of your editors this week ( ... )

Your BF edit! keppiehed June 6 2010, 22:56:54 UTC

-The villages all drew close to scent the flowers at their open best. -- This phrase is awkward. Perhaps "smell" instead of "scent" and "peak" instead of "open best ( ... )

Re: Your BF edit! selkie_queen June 7 2010, 11:09:11 UTC

Thank you so much for your prompt and detailed edit, this is exactly what I want when I get an edit. Thank you again, I appreciate you taking the time for this.

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selkie_queen June 14 2010, 02:28:18 UTC

I chose to put a Greek myth into an Indian culture. The names of the individuals and the oils are all from India.

Editor here :) openedlocket June 13 2010, 09:30:08 UTC

I love the creative take you took for this week's topic. I love folk legends of this sort and I really enjoyed reading this one ( ... )

Re: Editor here :) selkie_queen June 14 2010, 02:29:24 UTC

Thank you for the edit, I appreciate it. I'm glad you could enjoy the story as you helped edit.