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the_malediction November 8 2009, 17:51:32 UTC
To be honest, I was all over this story being real until I hit the part about the moon colonies. Then I went back and noticed that it said WWIII, and I mentally slapped myself. This is what I get for reading things when I first wake up in the morning.

In other news, I have to say I really liked this story. You (obviously!) told it really well, and it was an interesting idea. Despite your note at the end, it was pretty thought-provoking. Well done!

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selkie_queen November 8 2009, 22:39:11 UTC
Thanks, that was exactly what I was going for, being indistinguishable in time at first. Only when you read do you find out that this is very fictional. I'm glad you liked it. The percentages at the beginning of the second section are from actual Chinese census information concerning the 18-50 population of China...I'm not sure which year though. Still 53% male population isn't a good thng when your population is over a billion.

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selkie_queen November 8 2009, 22:39:54 UTC
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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cedarwolfsinger November 11 2009, 04:27:03 UTC
Fascinating story.

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selkie_queen November 12 2009, 01:47:52 UTC
Thank you :)

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ayadec November 11 2009, 21:22:06 UTC
Wow. This is a powerful piece. It did read a little like non-fiction out of the near future. Of course, like any interesting piece of writing, it raises questions:

1. How exactly does Ralph (I'm assuming that is the name of the narrator) protect those under his charge?

2. How are non-Asian countries like the US and Canada sure that they are only admitting (legally or illegally) Japanese and not Chinese citizens/nationals? Will the past/present US inconsistances with immigration cause problems or put the Japanese refugees at risk?

3. How do Japanese-Americans feel about these camps, as they might see a little like the WWII Japanese-American camps that their ancestors were forced to relocate to?

Again, great piece. I love it when fiction makes me think.

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selkie_queen November 12 2009, 01:55:43 UTC
Excellent questions and if I ever do something more with this I'll have to put those in, but for you...short answers ( ... )

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Editing cedarwolfsinger November 14 2009, 05:30:02 UTC
Hello, I am one of your editors for this week. Please note - I go paragraph by paragraph because that makes sense to me. Also - all my “changes” are merely suggestions. Take from them whatever makes sense to you and disregard whatever does not suit you ( ... )

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Re: Editing selkie_queen November 15 2009, 21:56:13 UTC
Thanks for the Edit, I'll make the changed on the word doc. I appreciate the help.

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