daniel/charlotte: "for you"

[hintofawhisper]

Title: For You
Rating: PG (K+)
Fandom: Lost
Pairings/Characters: Daniel/Charlotte; Daniel, Charlotte, Sawyer, Juliet, Miles, Jin, Richard, Eloise
Genre(s): Drama/Tragedy
Word Count: 1,491
Status: Complete
Spoilers: only up to 5x14 "The Variable"
Summary: She infiltrates his dreams, and the guilt presses painfully on him more with each passing day. He knows

Comments

[burnutica]

Aw, poor Daniel :(

Awesome work!

[hintofawhisper]

Poor Daniel, indeed. :(

Thank you!

[valhalla37]

Wow -- this was a fantastic take on Dan's perspective post-Charlotte's death. You really hit all the right notes, and I especially loved the interaction with Miles (and Dan's internal POV) and his moment with Baby!Charlotte. Touching and emotional, especially the end -- the unfinished sense of tragedy. Jarring in a really great way.

[hintofawhisper]

Thanks so much! I'm really glad you think all those things of this fic, and that you enjoyed it, especially the moments with Dan's internal POV, Miles, and Baby!Charlotte. :D

Your feedback is much appreciated!

[angela_weber]

Gah! I'm so late! And I'm afraid I don't have the time for the long comment this deserves--but first reaction: Eeeee, WOW. This is wonderful, and beautiful, and I love it very much! :D I'll be back tomorrow! :)

[hintofawhisper]

Late comments don't matter to me, you know that. ;) And thank you! Take your time; I'm just glad you enjoyed this. :D

[angela_weber]

I'm here! Wheeeeeee! :D *dives back in*

He crouches on the jungle floor, alone, and as he spots his journal a few feet ahead of him he’s overwhelmed with a mad desire to rip it apart, to tear it to pieces to match the state of his aching, bleeding heart, because he thought he knew what to do, he thought everything in it would save them, he thought it would save her.

First section in and you've already got me teary! ;) Really--this is beautiful and heartwrenching. This is very true to Dan.

The second section is so short, but it kills me, gahhh. I could feel his paralysis.

Oh, wow, the dreams! That's such a terrifying image, not!Charlotte with the blood trickling from her mouth--it reminds me of Ana Lucia in Eko's dream, actually. It's so effective and awful and sad, the whole concept. The idea of Dan just lying there with his hands covering his face is a haunting one. And the last line was wonderful:

And he can’t stand the way she looks at him now.!!! I love that he still thinks of Charlotte as looking at him, even though it all

[hintofawhisper]

WOW. First off, you are just amazing. This is such lovely feedback; you know I always look forward to your comments and you never disappoint. :D

First section in and you've already got me teary! ;) Really--this is beautiful and heartwrenching. This is very true to Dan.

Hee, I got you emotional so quickly into the story! I feel so accomplished, haha. ;D I'm glad you think so, and that it's true to his character.

The second section is so short, but it kills me, gahhh. I could feel his paralysis.

I'm happy it made quite an effect, despite how short it is. :)

Oh, wow, the dreams! That's such a terrifying image, not!Charlotte with the blood trickling from her mouth--it reminds me of Ana Lucia in Eko's dream, actually. It's so effective and awful and sad, the whole concept. The idea of Dan just lying there with his hands covering his face is a haunting one.Yay, you really liked that concept! :D I truly think it's pretty much a given that Charlotte haunted him in some way, whether in dreams or some other way (hey, you know the island is

[ozmissage]

Oh this was lovely and heartbreaking. I love your style, it has a wonderful, lyrical flow to it. You made me ache for Dan here. Awesome work!

[hintofawhisper]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :D