daniel/charlotte: "for you"
Title: For You
Rating: PG (K+)
Fandom: Lost
Pairings/Characters: Daniel/Charlotte; Daniel, Charlotte, Sawyer, Juliet, Miles, Jin, Richard, Eloise
Genre(s): Drama/Tragedy
Word Count: 1,491
Status: Complete
Spoilers: only up to 5x14 "The Variable"
Summary: She infiltrates his dreams, and the guilt presses painfully on him more with each passing day. He knows ( Read more... )
Rating: PG (K+)
Fandom: Lost
Pairings/Characters: Daniel/Charlotte; Daniel, Charlotte, Sawyer, Juliet, Miles, Jin, Richard, Eloise
Genre(s): Drama/Tragedy
Word Count: 1,491
Status: Complete
Spoilers: only up to 5x14 "The Variable"
Summary: She infiltrates his dreams, and the guilt presses painfully on him more with each passing day. He knows ( Read more... )
First section in and you've already got me teary! ;) Really--this is beautiful and heartwrenching. This is very true to Dan.
Hee, I got you emotional so quickly into the story! I feel so accomplished, haha. ;D I'm glad you think so, and that it's true to his character.
The second section is so short, but it kills me, gahhh. I could feel his paralysis.
I'm happy it made quite an effect, despite how short it is. :)
Oh, wow, the dreams! That's such a terrifying image, not!Charlotte with the blood trickling from her mouth--it reminds me of Ana Lucia in Eko's dream, actually. It's so effective and awful and sad, the whole concept. The idea of Dan just lying there with his hands covering his face is a haunting one.
Yay, you really liked that concept! :D I truly think it's pretty much a given that Charlotte haunted him in some way, whether in dreams or some other way (hey, you know the island is creepy, lol); perhaps it drove him to the point of being so grief-stricken that he decided he had to do something about it, like leave and go to Ann Arbor, then come back when he did some more research. The idea that Dan dreams of her being reproachful and accusatory makes my heart ache, but I think his guilt would make it be that way. He's convinced her death is completely his fault. And that Eko dream with Ana Lucia! That never even crossed my mind when I wrote this, but you're right, the parallels are clearly there. Oh, poor Dan. :(
!!! I love that he still thinks of Charlotte as looking at him, even though it all happens in his dreams and she's dead--it really speaks to his state of mind.
Good! I'm glad you think that would be accurate, in his case.
The almost-kiss was so sweet! It was very vivid in my mind.
Hee, I really loved writing that part; I like to think that perhaps something like that might've happened, but we just didn't see it. Dan reflecting on a moment like that, IMO, makes his grief and guilt all the more painful. It's great I was able to make it so vivid in your head! :D
Oh my God, wonderful. ♥ I just . . . the first-person pov is so jarring and it really puts you inside his head. Ouch.
I'm so glad you think so. I adore slipping in first-person pov to get the message across better (it was something I used once in a Jack fic), and apparently it did, so yay!
I love his conversation with Miles and Jin's smile across the room--they're both such small moments but they work so well and they feel so true to character. Why didn't we see this???
Funnily enough, I almost contemplated not putting those things in, or at least writing it some other way, but decided to leave it alone. And I'm glad I did, now. :) I'm so happy you liked that bit, and that they seem in-character for both, and yes, I wish we could've seen something like this! The Jin part, especially, since he and Daniel have that painful thing in common.
Aww, thank you so, so much! The best thing I've ever written? Quite the compliment, coming from you. ;D
The end in particular is so jarring and awful and beautiful, and really, I admire you for even tackling such a difficult character, and for doing it so well--I'm jealous. ;D This is AMAZING, really. Poignant, and as I said, that last section hit me incredibly hard. I adore it so very much! :D
Oh, it makes me so giddy to know you enjoyed the ending that much! And wow-- you really think I wrote Dan so well? That's amazing to me really. XD I'm so flattered, and I'm so glad you loved this story. Your awesome feedback has made my day, so thank you very much! :D *tackles and hugs you tightly* <3
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