FIC: Future Imperfect (10/16) (Kirk/McCoy, dystopic AU)

[savoytruffle]

Title: Future Imperfect (10/16)
Pairing: Kirk/McCoy
Rating: Mature (this part)
Word count: 2,923
Warnings: Slavery "light"
Thanks: To cordelianne, who is out walking the world's cutest dog in the cold, cold snow.
Notes: This story takes place in the same time period as the 2009 movie (and will roughly follow its events), but imagines the future as a eugenic

Comments

[sangueuk]

Oh my, this is unbelievably intense and brilliant. Poor Jim, poor Sam. :( So sad, and excellently told. I really loved how Bones wanted to know, how the conversation, the reveal developed.

I'm agog waiting for the next installment.

[syredronning]

*open mouth*

Whoa, what an installment! We learn some new, very important things about Jim AND Pike. And what a big, big revelation in the last sentence. You always write the most awesome cliffhangers :)

[mijan]

Oooh, snap. Excellent chapter, good revelation. I've been waiting diligently for updates on this, and you didn't disappoint! Still following faithfully.

Also, typo:

“Well, we might as well chat about something,” Pike says, taking a seat at the side of room, “because you’re sparring is for shit today.”

That's a "your" not a "you're" in the dialogue there. :)

[savoytruffle]

Got it! Thanks!

[rogueangel1998]

OMG!!!! You stopped it there? how could you? I...I'm never taling to you again!

Okay, maybe I will. Just to beg. Please, please post again soon. You just can't leave us like this! I'm so happy to have an update, I've missed this story, but...please?

Take care - lot's of vitamin C, look both ways when you cross the street, watch out for idiot drivers...and post soon!

RA (who really had gone off the deep end. Stupid malibu rum!_

[treksnoopy]

This was worth waiting for! Excellent chapter! Jim's secrets are beginning to be revealed, but as always you've left us on the most enticing cliff. I can't wait for more!