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Fic For Challenge #5 on sasunaru100!

Jun 09, 2006 18:48

I found it!!! I can post here now!!! Yesh! (Am I too late for the challenge???)

(For Challenge #5 - this is my first attempt at trying such a feat, please excuse me if it is terrible.)
Title: Your Gift Called Loneliness

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narusasu, sasunaru, loneliness, fic

Comments 15

rainbowfragment June 9 2006, 23:05:46 UTC

I think I was too late for the challenge... oh well.. darn. There is always next time. (Note to self: What kind of looser posts on their own work??? -me...)

Anyways, people read and respond nonetheless, and if you don't well I assume that means it's worth shit. (And I can cuss regarding my own works! ^_~)

Sincerely,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)

I love how much of a looser I am that it took me like three days to figure out how to post to a community! ^_^;

hitzusin June 10 2006, 00:25:43 UTC

Awe don't say thaaaat! You're not late for the challenge! =D I haven't even started the poll yet! XDDDDDD. I had some rl stuff going on today so I'm a bit late in doing it. xD

rainbowfragment June 10 2006, 00:56:37 UTC

oh, thanks. It was alright really. Like I said. I am just happy I figured out how to post on the community!! ^_^ Thanks once again though. And how does this poll stuff work? I tried looking at it on the community but it was really weird. (Can you tell I am making an effort to get more involved in the community here? ^_^) So, guess I'll see how this all works.
g2g, mom wants game.

Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)

hitzusin June 10 2006, 01:04:37 UTC

Oh and can you un-lock this entry please? All posts are open to the public. I'd appreciate it, thanks.

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napkins June 10 2006, 06:27:04 UTC

^_^ i liked it a lot! good job on it!

rainbowfragment June 11 2006, 22:18:52 UTC

Thanks! That was my first attempt and positive feedback means a lot to me! I really appreciate it! I will have to try harder next time plot wise, I believe I was a little lazy with this and I didn't think and consider as much as I should have. (Which I am quite ashamed of and I am sure Hee-chan is too.) But there is always room for improvement! I mostly did it to just get a little more invovled with the community outside of just reading! Get to know more people and I also wanted to learn how to post to a specific community and get in touch with lots of people at once! ^_~ Now I can! ^_^ And with this great knowledge I can inact my evil mastermind plot!!! MWAHAHAHA

Soon Mission spread the NaruSasu will be accomplished! And I will get others to think and understand my views, and hopefully get some positive and in depth feedback! ^_^ (We shall see...)

Sincerely (insane),
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)

napkins June 12 2006, 03:55:43 UTC

^_^ hurah for spreading NaruSasu! Sorry my inital comment wasn't more detailed; i was a little rushed. Now that I have more time, I can comment a little more in-depth.

I love how detailed everything is; you don't skimp on adjectives or adverbs at all, and it really gives a more detailed picture of what's going on.

On thing though, the last sentece, the "Yes, Sasuke, I do." was a little unclear as to what Naruto was referring to. After a few rereads, I got the impression that he was just reinforcing his promise, but it was unclear. But that's the only quibble i have, so you're good!

rainbowfragment June 14 2006, 18:45:56 UTC

Oh, it's alright. No need for detail. I get the idea from the fact that you give a positive response. ^_^

Oh, to be truthful that detail and adjective thing that everyone loves so much I must thank my dearest twin Hee-chan for that trait. As I mention above I usually never do fan fiction alone. I always write story, plot, characters, everything with Hee-chan. And she was really picky about being detailed. She loves those beautifully detailed drawings, stories, novels, and things. So my vagueness as well as ability to explain in so many words but just the right amount to keep the length from overpowering is entirely based on her influence! ^_^ (Thanks Hee-chan!) Though sometimes when I get lazy I still have to work at it cause it takes hours to get that sort of crap out. (And that is probably also why I could never do a bona fide drabble -_ ( ... )

itthinghardon June 12 2006, 17:36:03 UTC

Fantastic! Don't be so hard on yourself, I think this is really great. Your descriptives are beautiful, really help the atmosphere of the story and the ambiance of everyone's moods.

I also think it's entirely believable - with Naruto's character, the way his strength of conviction is set up, I can definitely see him bouncing right back and not letting Sasuke's coldness affect him. The 'dream' sequence was nicely understated, hushed, a good contrast to the darkness in the beginning of the fic.

I'm really glad you've figured out the community posting and can join us here, now, and that you made it in time for the deadline!

rainbowfragment June 14 2006, 18:48:30 UTC

Awww.... that brought tears to my eyes how you described my fic!! ^_^ + T-T

You make it sound so beautiful. More beautiful than even I would have seen it in a million years! That is quite touching! Thanks for the ego boost! ^_^ And most of all glad to have you enjoy! (I never would have thought of me doing contrast?! I guess that was subconcious... and I thought this was sloppy...)

I think I am liking this getting involved in the fanfic community! ^_^

Sincerely,
Shinigami Twin 04
(Quatre Raberba Winner)