a bowl of dark water, rinsing your face, RPS, J2 AU, 1/1, [PG], (Beach Verse)

[sandymg]

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[fireheart13]

*collapses sobbing on the floor*

[sandymg]

Hmmm. Not necessarily my intent. I really hope that I can write more in short order.

[fireheart13]

It's just that he is so, so damaged, and he doesn't even know it. And he;s hurting Jared, and he;s going to do the same thing to Danneel. And then there's the whole horrible ripping away of Bunny. I don't know how he and Jared are going to come back from this, but I still hope they manage to somehow.

As always, your writing is just beautiful. I love the way he is so tied into the beach and the ocean.

*whimpers*

[sandymg]

Thank you again and especially for chatting with me about the story, which is a rather rare thing in these parts. He is damaged but I believe he is not beyond repair. Perhaps things need to happen to help him along. I'm glad you like the beach obsession. To me it was made clear when he mentioned once that he felt like the beach (and the moon) raised him.

[roxymissrose]

This made me feel ill, like actually, stomach-aching ill. His mother is such a loveless influence in his life, she's like a snake, spreading her venom into every part of Jensen's life and worse, into the people who love him, too...if it ends here, I will cry my eyes out.

[sandymg]

It will not end there. I'm not positive just now when I'll be able to get back to it. I'll know more tomorrow morning.

But I'm appreciative of how much you like these characters and want to see them get their happy ending.

[tcs1121]

*crying on the floor next to fireheart13*

But I understand where Jensen is coming from. He's wrong, but I understand him.

Powerful writing, my dear. You realize that you have to fix this, right?

[sandymg]

I do indeed need to fix things. But I think a few things have to get worse before getting better. Not to mention my love of poking backward in time with this verse. Honestly, I'll have a much better handle tomorrow on whether I'll be able to add more in shortly or if it'll take a little time.

[borgmama1of5]

See, I'm not the only one you reduced to tears with this!

I am not sure which line broke me more:
It’s okay, dear, we are made of stronger stuff.
or
One down. One to go.
or
“You can’t make me go,”...“I won’t have to.”

All of them together have reduced me to a catatonic state...

[sandymg]

You pointed to all my faves. Although 'one down. one to go.' is my fave.

You'll know when I know how quickly this is continuing. Here's hoping ...

[fireheart13]

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

[peepingdru]

okkkkkkkkkkk....my aim today was to cheer up...***fail****...wibbles and wails with everyone...........<<<333

[sandymg]

I am sorry that this installment was not quite there yet for our boys. But be assured that my aim is pure :) Thanks so much for reading and commenting.