“The witch.” Oh MAN! I am now just DYING to know who the witch is! You sure know who to keep your readers wanting more without even invoking cliffhangers. If I didn't have work to do before tonight's ep I would definitely be moving right on to the next part.
They all saw a beast. And Jared saw an angel. That is just beautiful. Doubly so in that Jared still hasn't even seen his face.
Woodward and Bernstein -- was that an intentional Watergate reference?
If only … if only Sandy had said something like that. She didn’t have to believe in Jensen. It would have been enough if she’d just believed in Jared. Yes, I was thinking exactly this. :)
The entire scene with their aborted camping trip was so well-written and effective. That's exactly the sort of experience you look back on with new eyes after a breakup. I especially loved: She smiled crookedly at him and never again looked up. Beautiful and so poignant. You could give clinics on how to write with poignancy without being melodramatic.
Your fantastic comments are like candy. Luckily, not as fattening :)
The Watergate reference was less politics and more theme. They named the dogs after a theme. And they were doing famous journalists just then.
The beast/angel line is one of my favorites in the entire story. Thanks for pointing it out :)
Jared liking camping and being outdoors seemed to fit his personality. And I thought I could easily make it another difference between him and Sandy. Alone any of these differences isn't much. Cumulatively, though, they added up and eventually, as you say, post-breakup they took on more significance to Jared.
The action sequence was penned by borgmama1of5 -- she excels at these. I edited a little to match my tone. But the credit goes to her for that sequence. I did tell her that Jensen should be stabbed though. Evil me.
The next chapter is pivotal. I can't wait to hear your thoughts on it.
The action sequence was penned by borgmama1of5 -- she excels at these.
Wow, I never would have guessed that. It was absolutely seamless with the rest of your fic. I've read stories where two of more writers worked together where it was so obvious that I swore I could hear the manuscripts being handed back and forth in the background. Great job from both of you on that bit. :)
I figured that was the case with the Watergate reference but just wanted to make certain that I wasn't missing a whole other theme!
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Oh MAN! I am now just DYING to know who the witch is! You sure know who to keep your readers wanting more without even invoking cliffhangers. If I didn't have work to do before tonight's ep I would definitely be moving right on to the next part.
They all saw a beast.
And Jared saw an angel.
That is just beautiful. Doubly so in that Jared still hasn't even seen his face.
Woodward and Bernstein -- was that an intentional Watergate reference?
If only … if only Sandy had said something like that. She didn’t have to believe in Jensen. It would have been enough if she’d just believed in Jared.
Yes, I was thinking exactly this. :)
The entire scene with their aborted camping trip was so well-written and effective. That's exactly the sort of experience you look back on with new eyes after a breakup. I especially loved:
She smiled crookedly at him and never again looked up.
Beautiful and so poignant. You could give clinics on how to write with poignancy without being melodramatic.
“You wish to see the Beast?” Jensen asked ( ... )
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The Watergate reference was less politics and more theme. They named the dogs after a theme. And they were doing famous journalists just then.
The beast/angel line is one of my favorites in the entire story. Thanks for pointing it out :)
Jared liking camping and being outdoors seemed to fit his personality. And I thought I could easily make it another difference between him and Sandy. Alone any of these differences isn't much. Cumulatively, though, they added up and eventually, as you say, post-breakup they took on more significance to Jared.
The action sequence was penned by borgmama1of5 -- she excels at these. I edited a little to match my tone. But the credit goes to her for that sequence. I did tell her that Jensen should be stabbed though. Evil me.
The next chapter is pivotal. I can't wait to hear your thoughts on it.
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Wow, I never would have guessed that. It was absolutely seamless with the rest of your fic. I've read stories where two of more writers worked together where it was so obvious that I swore I could hear the manuscripts being handed back and forth in the background. Great job from both of you on that bit. :)
I figured that was the case with the Watergate reference but just wanted to make certain that I wasn't missing a whole other theme!
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And I reeaally need to get to bed now if I have any chance of being coherent tomorrow but I can't stop reading!
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There are many discoveries to come in the story.
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