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sammistarr

Fanfic--Music Meme Challenge (1/10-12)

Feb 24, 2009 22:12

Title: Love Song
Pairing: Davy Jones/Calypso
Rating: R
Summary: "The scent would haunt him for days after she had left his side..."
Disclaimer: Characters belong to the Mouse!

Note: For the Music Meme Fanfic Challenge posted here. Pairing: Davy/Calypso, Music: Love Song by Sara Bareilles, Words to use: Melancholy, Cost, Tomorrow

( Love Song )

fanfic, calypso, davy, meme, potc

Comments 11

casey_leigh February 25 2009, 04:14:49 UTC

Um. Yeah.

Got a little misty eyed. Davy/Calypso has ALWAYS been one of my favorite pairings, and you portrayed it very well. So tragic! :(

sammistarr March 3 2009, 03:05:30 UTC

*hands you a tissue*

I'm really glad you liked this! I know you like Davy/Calypso, and I'm happy you think I did it justice. *cuddles*

stealmybike February 25 2009, 05:08:51 UTC

This was wonderful! You have a beautiful grasp of the characters in this piece, and it's so refreshing to see little snippets of Jones/Calypso on their days ashore once every ten years.

You've captured a lot of passion in your first paragraph. It really drew me into the story, and you've ended with such a strong closing - successfully showing how Calypso was truly as unpredictable as the sea.

Favorite passage: "No tears were shed as the Dutchman disappeared in a flash of green. He hadn’t expected it of her-she was not prone to melancholy. She was strong, beautiful, fiery…she was perfection. And she was his. Willingly he sailed into the unknown simply because she had bid him to do so."

Beautifully written, and I can really sense how much he cared for her in this!

Great job love!

sammistarr March 3 2009, 03:09:11 UTC

*squeeeees*
Thank you so much for your wonderful comment!

Part of this whole exercise was to write new (to me)pairings/characters, so I'm really excited that you think I did well with them!

sunsetdawn20 February 25 2009, 10:51:32 UTC

Ok, first of all SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!! You did it!!! *happy dance* Ok, now I will actually read it *giggles* but I'm so happy you decided to do this. :)

sunsetdawn20 February 25 2009, 10:58:28 UTC

Oh this is absolutely gorgeous. Very sad, very real, very them.

"her hips rising to meet his thrusts like the swell of a wave lapping against the hull of a ship" I adored this, I'm such a sucker for sea/ship metaphors :P

And the ending was brilliant. Full with the lack of emotions (and I'm not sure anyone will understand what I mean but I'll just leave it unexplained, lol)

sammistarr March 3 2009, 03:10:54 UTC

Thank you for your wonderful comment, and for letting me shamelessly pirate your meme! *g*

And I totally do understand what you were saying re: full w/ the lack of emotions--I think you nailed what I was going for (even though I can't exactly explain it either), but I think we're on the same page!

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed.

mary684 February 25 2009, 13:59:16 UTC

Oh, how I love that last line. No, regret is not in her nature. And, at first, I was wondering if that nameless sailor wss Jack (which is something I've often wondering at, if she forsook Davy for a tumble with Jack) but I sort of love that she sleeps with some nameless guy she just happens to meet along the way -- how utterly like her!

Nice start with your meme! Look forward to seeing what else you come up with.

sammistarr March 3 2009, 03:13:26 UTC

*huggles* Thank you so much for reading, for your wonderful comment, and for your encouragement!

And I seriously thought about having Jack be the sailor, but then I realized that I couldn't figure out the timeline--I think she would have betrayed Davy years and years and years before Jack, but I wasn't sure, so I went with a random sailor. Glad it worked *g*