I Got You Under My Skin (Prompt 13: Touch)

[puddingcat]

Title: I Got You Under My Skin
Prompt: 13, Touch
Author: puddingcat
Characters: Gojyo, Jien & Hakkai
Time: Curses, 15 minutes!

Comments

[eyesofshinigami]

I liked this a lot! I really liked that last paragraph...it really struck me. And the last line packed a punch.

Really well done. ♥

[puddingcat]

Thank you! The end took me by surprise; I had the idea for the start, but thought that that would be it.

[lauand]

I liked how you never mentioned what you were talking about. There's some elegance in letting the readers find out for themselves.

[puddingcat]

Thank you! Although that wasn't intentional; I suppose I just had such a clear image in my head that I didn't think to explain :) A lucky oversight!

[freeradical9]

I love the life that you've given to Jien here. The button to make his nose fall off... ah, the ultimate big brother line! The ending was very emotional and bittersweet.

[puddingcat]

Thank you!

(Dad did the "got your nose!" thing with his thumb once when I was little, and apparently I screamed and screamed and screamed until he pretended to stick it back on, and showed me in a mirror...)

[theskywasblue]

So, so very sweet, especially the part about Jien and Gojyo. It's adorable.

[puddingcat]

Thank you! I do think that when they were affectionate, it would be really intense, to pretend that things weren't so horrible the rest of the time.

[purpleicicles]

Doku can make his youkai mark move too? I like this idea! I guess Gojyo would have a slight fixation on youkai marks, not having one of his own... or doesn't he? ;3 Loved the 'nose button' and the last line... I just loved all of it! ^___^

[puddingcat]

Thank you! I don't see why Jien *wouldn't* be able to move his mark (although I can't imagine anyone wh isn't as powerful as Hakkai being able to extend it outside his body). It would make a wonderful peek-a-oo game for a small brother :)

(I don't *think* Gojyo has a mark of his own - I've never seen one in pictures of him. Clearly, Minekura needs to do a series of nudes, so we can make sure...)

[purpleicicles]

I support this proposal 100%!!! Let's try to convince Minekura-sensei, shall we? :D