Fic: what's in a handshake

[ghaidin]

Title: What's in a handshake
Characters: Shura, tiny bits of Aiolos
Word count: ~ 1700 (sorry..)
Warnings: not fun, not fluffy...wouldn't call it angsty either.

Comments

[scorpioyue]

One lil' question: Isn't it thought instead of though? -> However, the child was too wasted to properly register the thought

His fellow trainee had lost his tongue before loosing his mind and jumping off the cliff.

Oh my... @_@ I really liked the way you told the story. The details helped me to actually see what was going on. Poor Shura. ^^

[ghaidin]

ouch! You're completely right, it should be "thought." Thanks a lot for pointing it out!

And i'm very glad you liked it :D

[scorpioyue]

You're very welcome! And I feel the same about my English. :S

[ghaidin]

Wouldn't it be easier if everybody spoke Spanish? I mean... it didn't take *me* long to learn. And if a stonehead like me can handle it at a young age, it must mean it's really easy! *grin*

[undertheice]

Wow, this was really good! I loved the description of the fight, Shura's master strictnes and the way it all was narrated. I could picture everything so well in my mind, it was very effective to help me imagine how painful it was what Shura was going through.

I really enjoyed reading it. ^^

[ghaidin]

Thank you so much! I wasn't sure if the description wasn't a bit over the top.

About that master... well, the story was written a loooong time ago, so I don't remember what was in my mind when I came up with the sick bastard. But Shura was always so annoyingly blind-loyal that I always thought he had to have had a son-of-a-# as teacher to render him so obedient and sheep-like.
(I don't particularly like my fellow countryman and it shows :P)

[shadow_arashi]

That was very well written, I don't usually care much for Shura but you managed to do an powerfull and interesting story. ^^

[ghaidin]

Funny thing is I don't care much about him either
Thank you so very much for your comment,it's very much appreciated! *blushes*

[taichara]

Excellent! (and apologies for getting to it so late ...)

The scene played itself out so smoothly in my eyes as I read it; always something that I adore. I would say that you have Shura spot-on, as well, even as the young one he is here ^_^

Definitely like ^_^

[ghaidin]

thanks a lot! (I know about late...I'm quite behind with all the readings lately)

*blushes* thank you so much for the compliment. I'm very glad you liked it :D

[taichara]

Credit where credit is due ^_^