Challenge #8. The Temple of Time

[muinteor]

Title : The Temple of Time
Challenge : #8 What if?
Characters : Mu
Word count : 1.679
Note : Set after the death of Pope Saga.

Comments

[december_star]

Oh boy! I had so not expected that end, after they had prevented Ares to take over power. Such a dark image of the future, such a weak Athena. This is so well done, very well written and makes one think. Thank you :D

[muinteor]

I'm glad you liked it.

It wasn't my intention to make Athena seem weak, only defeated. She is a very strong character, in my opinion, and though she doesn't have spectacular martial arts skills, and seems not to do much, in the end she's the one it all depends on. If Athena surrenders, it doesn't matter how many spectre asses Seiya and friends kick.

In this final moment, it goes without saying who will be Hades' first offering to his father...

And no need to thank me... the pleasure was all mine.

[december_star]

Oh, you don't have to convince me of Saori's worth, she is my favourite female character after all :) Despite everyone saying she is a wimp and all that. I also think that the Saints would not be able to accomplish what they do without her. I'm glad you didn't mean to picture her as weak, rather than defeated.

Poor Athena :(

[muinteor]

I don't agree with people who say Saori is a wimp. She just isn't. She's a Godess and in my opinion the central character of the whole series. Of course without her there would be nothing to accomplish.

This is a "what if..." drabble after all, and Athena has never really been defeated.

Don't be sad, it was only a story.

[torquemadman]

Very powerfully written. Lovely macabre mood you started with and was steadily grewing to the end, which is, too, great: the end of the world, complete with destruction of Gods -- who know that. Loved that!

A wee little nitpickery, though: some of the ellipses in the end, was, IMHO, a bit superfluous. The story's beginning have almost none of them, and the ending's got quite plenty; sometimes a simple dot creates more horror mood than ellipse.

[muinteor]

Macabre is my favourite adjective, thank you.

Glad you liked the story.

About the nitpicking (never heard nitpickery before) don't you worry. Superfluous ellipses... God forbid!

Thank the Lord you pointed that out...

I'll be more wary of that in future.

[milosflaca]

ahhh... well joe.. It's just a marvelous fic *shivers*.
Everything happens for a reason, hu? I just love the way you write, I'm glad you wrote something for the challenge :)))))))).

[muinteor]

Oh yes, everything happens for a reason, Aurea.

In my opinion, one of the greatest temptations of the "what if?" idea is the dillema of the time machine.

If you could go back in time and change one thing... what would you do?

But of course, if you change something, then the paradox backlash could have devastating results in the present, changing it radically.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

[undertheice]

Oh my. I'm speechless at the moment, I sure didn't expect such a haunting ending when I started reading this. You set the mood wonderfully though, haunting, a bit macabre and hopeless. I knew it couldn't end well but you really managed to write a powerful piece. Who knew Mu's actions could have such consequences.

I'm impressed! It was really well written.

[muinteor]

Of course it couldn't end well, but you know what they say...

The road to hell is paved with good intentions.

Thank you for your comments, they are appreciated.

[ghaidin]

Poor, poor Mu. Brought the Armaggedon over everybody, so sad :(

[muinteor]

He did, didn't he?