Fic: Second Chance

[plantress]

Author:Plantress
Title: Second Chance
Summary:A series of three interconnected scenes that deal with what would happen if Aiolos had survived.

Comments

[undertheice]

Ooh, I like this! You really developed well this "what-if" scenario. Details like Aiolos getting a new name, acting as Saori's brother and working together with old man Kido are all things I can see happening. My favorite line has to be this one:

it brought him down to Saori’s level and allowed him to kneel before his goddess.

Because it shows how he's Saori's brother but also Athena's Saint. I can imagine him showing his loyalty in such a subtle way.

I'll be looking forward to the rest of the scenes.

[plantress]

Thank you! ^^

When I first wrote that scene, it was just Aiolos getting down on one knee to talk to Saori. When I reread it though, some thing in my mind went 'Hey, Aiolos is kneeling before her, isn't he?' It's a good example of why you should let the characters tell you what to do when writing, instead of the other way around.

[torquemadman]

This is really good realization of alternate timeline. You might want to fix php type tags (in square brackets) into html ones, though. ;)

[plantress]

Thanks for the comment. I keep meaning to edit this, but I just haven't found the time yet.