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[Naruto] Patriarch (how not to be a)

Feb 02, 2007 13:10

Title: Patriarch (how not to be a)
Author: runespoor7
Rating: PG
Summary: Once, one of the brats of Jiraiya's brat stole a Sharingan.
Notes:…This started as a cracky two-line parenthesis in another fic. Then I realised it was getting to be a ficlet, still cracky, but with things that could be called serious undertones if you were feeling indulgent. Then it ( Read more... )

ch: tsunade, gen, fandom: naruto, ch: jiraiya, ch: orochimaru, fic

Comments 14

elict February 2 2007, 12:49:29 UTC

Wonderful. I love it.

I find Jiraiya really hard to write, and this was lovely. He and Tsunade really are the only ones (on the "good" side) who has the whole picture, aren't they?

The usage of the word "brat" confused me sometimes, because there was a lot of it. But in the same time, it's so very much like Jiraiya, therefore I wouldn't want it any other way ^^'';

runespoor7 February 2 2007, 12:56:50 UTC

If anyone had told me I'd find Orochimaru to the easiest to write out of the Sannin - if anyone had told me I'd find Tsunade easier to write than Jiraiya...

They do have the whole picture, and it's so hard to stay ambiguous is these conditions.

Ah , yes. Brat. Well, I needed a Jiraiya word to avoid having to name Yondaime, and then it just sort of became Jiraiya's word to call kids he care about. Is there any special occurence where it was too unclear, or is it just the fact that it comes up so much that makes it hard to follow?

elict February 2 2007, 13:08:19 UTC

It's more the fact that it's used so much. One has to think before one understands who he's thinking about. But it's not a big problem, it's probably just me being slow XP

runespoor7 February 2 2007, 13:14:22 UTC

Okay. I'll try to think if I want to make an effort and find another word because this fic frightens me a little to tell the truth.

Otherwise I'll just blame Jiraiya.

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shafted_artist February 2 2007, 21:34:31 UTC

Wow... For a cracky-type fic that was really good! I'm quite intrigued and the AU possibilities you listed also sound interesting. Like someone else said, the over-usage of the word 'brat' could get a little confusing, but it does seem like such a Jiraiya thing to do, so...

Anyway, super props to you! It was a nice read.

Eraya ^_~

runespoor7 February 3 2007, 20:46:48 UTC

Wee, thanks! :) Not sure I'll actually write any of the AUs, but hey, you never know.

I think I'll probably just keep the 'brat' and blame Jiraiya. ;) He's very blamable.

caitlin_chan February 11 2007, 19:18:29 UTC

This was really interesting to read, and nicely written. Your insertion of Iruka had me squeeing, because I love Iruka to pieces. XDD Also, I'm amused by Jiraiya's usage of 'brat' in referring to Yondy and Kakashi.

Maybe, if you want to use a different word than brat in a few places, then maybe... I dunno... lemme come up with a list here....

Okay, I've got: imp, punk, squirt, kid, rascal, urchin and... hellion. Those are the only ones I can think of that sound even vaguely Jiraiya.

runespoor7 February 12 2007, 14:41:06 UTC

I want to be Iruka when I grow up. And well, if I was going to throw a kid in there...

The thing with 'brat' is that once I started thinking that Jiraiya would use it as if it were a name, it clung. And now I like it. ;_; but *pokes* I like squirt, as well. That'd fit him too. I'm probably never going to do anything about it except think and ponder, though.

Thank you muchly for the review and the helpful synonym list! :)

caitlin_chan February 12 2007, 14:52:40 UTC

Well, I like being a girl, so I wouldn't want to BE Iruka, but I'd certainly like to know him!

Yeah, I do that, too. Cement a certain nickname or manner of speech in my head and then not want to change it. XDD

You're very welcome, for both! I write, too, so I know just how much getting a review can make one's day. ^^

kane_shi_megami February 28 2007, 22:59:02 UTC

I really liked this. It really stayed true to Jiraiya's character and gave great reasoning to why he would want to leave instead of him just deciding one day he was gone. The tsunade pieces when he was describing her were right on the money in my opinion. Very nice. If you do add another one, I'll sure read it ^-^

runespoor7 March 5 2007, 08:19:16 UTC

Thank you! ^_^ I'm glad you thought Jiraiya and Tsunade were IC - re: Jiraiya, I always thought that he'd need a reason to leave Konoha, since I think he was chronologically the last one to leave (and it'd make sense that he left after the Kyuubi's attack, I suppose. Cheap drama ftw!), and pre-Naruto Tsunade is Sannin!Sasuke in terms of brokenness.

Don't know when/if I'll come back to this, but thank you!

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runespoor7 May 9 2007, 07:18:08 UTC

Thank you!

Orochimaru was so much fun to write, he should be illegal. ...besides the fact that he's a missing-nin and thus kind of already is, but.

Heh, the turn into angst was very much not expected, but I learnt to go with the story. (otherwise the bunny-bites hurt ;_;)

Anyway, I'm glad you liked!

Alas, don't really have a muse for it right now. *poky stick fails*