Starting Over

[shayna611]

Blueberry Yogurt #10. Across the Miles
Story : knights & necromancers rewrite // ( old stuff here)
Rating : G
Timeframe : Book One
Word Count : ~900

Comments

[hi_falootin]

Great place to start things! I totally want to know where this is going and I love the idea of opening with the temple :) Your writing here is also very smooth! Scenes with only one character (even with a cat, haha) are tricky to write, but I think you nailed it.

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

I am so happy to be writing again, I need to keep going! I hate scenes with just one person, so I milked the hell out of that cat.

[etherealpenguin]

This was really intriguing. I love the moving home/temple, and the mystery knocker. Great new beginning!

[shayna611]

thanks! :)

[fachefaucheux]

Wonderful start! You did a great job with it. Now keep going! XD

Titles...titles...I dunno, the title of my main trilogy set doesn't have much to do with the actual happenings of any of them. I just liked "Anthem". I guess that means I have to tie it in somewhere...I guess you could go my way and give it a name you like, and then tie it in somewhere where it seems like it'd fit? I dunno.

[shayna611]

Thank you! :)

Hopefully I can keep it up (keep pestering me to do so, please!)

[nathskywalker]

This is very intriguing. I don't know the old beginning but this is a great new way to start things and I really want to know what happens next.^

[shayna611]

Thanks! :)

In the old version, Ski came personally to recruit Rune, but I think I'd much rather have them meet by "chance"

[niee87]

Oooh, very intriguing and awesome! I like the way you've set things up here. It seems like a good beginning to me!