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Heart's Desire

Aug 18, 2011 22:49

Title: Heart's Desire
Story Continuity: Battle For the Sun
Flavors: Gingerbread 17: to grandmother's house, Blueberry Yogurt 22: making repairs, Papaya 5: I told you so
Rating: PG-13
Word count: 1517
Summary: Jaida has some fun with an undead adversary.
Note: Meme prompt: "This Girl is a Storm, five minutes after, Cyprian and company turn up and ( Read more... )

[challenge] gingerbread, [inactive-author] dark faerie claw, [challenge] papaya, [challenge] blueberry yogurt

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darkfaerieclaw August 19 2011, 04:22:52 UTC

You may say I don't need you to tell me I'm awesome, but I do like to hear what works, and you never disappoint. :) Thank you very much! It's good to hear from you.

smoothiegarten August 19 2011, 06:48:25 UTC

Oh, JAIDA. I laughed a LOT at the fight and the commentary from the other three, but the interspersed flashbacks added a lot of depth to it and made it really well rounded.

darkfaerieclaw August 19 2011, 13:30:23 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you think so. <3

lady_macbeth_19 August 19 2011, 15:51:27 UTC

I really like the effect you induce with the flash backs: it gives the whole piece a very deep understanding. I also like the way you used the prompt :P And obviously I don't know your canon very well, but I LOVED Jaida. For more than just her awesome name :P
XxLil

darkfaerieclaw August 19 2011, 16:02:12 UTC

Thank you kindly! That's great to hear. I'm glad you were able to enjoy this despite your lack of familiarity with the story in general. ^_^

I also like the way you used the prompt :P

I like to pretend I'm clever. <3

kay_brooke August 19 2011, 18:25:12 UTC

I love the flashbacks. They just add so much to the story,, when the fight scene was already pretty awesome. Jaida is a really interesting character. I love her confidence (it's not hubris if you can actually back up your words!).

darkfaerieclaw August 19 2011, 18:44:48 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad to hear you everything seems to be to your liking. <3

(it's not hubris if you can actually back up your words!)

I think Cyprian is just flashing back to some painful memories himself. He's probably heard similar badass boasts that have ended much poorly, and he hasn't known Jaida for very long yet. :)

bookblather August 20 2011, 03:12:00 UTC

Seriously, I know I commented on the other one already but this is just splendid. The link between the present and the past, the way they sort of bleed together, the way Jaida is splendid and terrifying and magical all at once, the COMMENTARY which I still love, just splendid. Awesome.

darkfaerieclaw August 20 2011, 03:15:07 UTC

As I said, I was working on something similar, so really I should also thank you for helping it along. I love it when a good plan comes together.

Thank you! I'm (still) thrilled you liked it enough to comment twice. <3