Comments | runaway_tales: FOTD, Vinegar 24, Cola 4: Certain

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FOTD, Vinegar 24, Cola 4: Certain

Jun 03, 2011 23:29

Title: Certain
Main Story: In the Heart
Flavors, Toppings, Extras: FOTD (decollete: wearing a low-necked garment), vinegar 24 (may contain small parts), cola 4 (sometimes you feel like a nut), My Treat (Newborn Ivy makes Gail wonder briefly if she'd made the right decision-then she remembers she has), malt (Sara's birthday prompt: "Is this one of ( Read more... )

[challenge] vinegar, [extra] malt, [topping] whipped cream, [challenge] cola, [inactive-author] bookblather, [challenge] flavor of the day

Comments 15

anonymous June 4 2011, 03:39:25 UTC

anonymous June 4 2011, 03:48:27 UTC

Re: Mod note gandolforf June 4 2011, 04:03:31 UTC

I'm really confused by the distinction between whipped cream and rainbow sprinklesSprinkles = characters that are not your "main" cast ( ... )

Re: Mod note bookblather June 7 2011, 05:06:22 UTC

Ooooooh, and now I get it. Thanks so much for explaining it to me! I'll go ahead and take it off, I think.

gandolforf June 4 2011, 04:09:39 UTC

omgggg, must have epidural. I slept through most of it thanks to one! Also, this rings very true for the new parent of a newborn...the first couple of weeks/months are hard. But they are worth it.

This line especially was great: In that moment she loved her daughter so fiercely she could hardly breathe.

bookblather June 7 2011, 05:06:47 UTC

Epidural is friend. And yeah, I figured being a parent is really, really effing scary, but definitely worth it. Thank you!

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bookblather June 7 2011, 05:07:20 UTC

Thanks so much! Description's my weak spot, so I'm glad I did good things with it this time around.

smoothiegarten June 4 2011, 06:52:24 UTC

Awwwwww newbown!Ivy so cuuuuuute <3

I love the way you portrayed Gail's uncertainty and love here, how you showed that the two aren't mutually exclusive. She's not going to be perfect at being a mom, but she'll do the best she can and Ivy's going to turn out wonderfully :D

bookblather June 7 2011, 05:08:06 UTC

It's the only time she's not actively trying to set things on fire!

I figured that for Gail especially, this was going to be one of the most terrifying things she'd ever done, and it's terrifying because she loves her daughter so much. But she will do a fantastic job.

Thank you.

ellis12 June 4 2011, 06:56:36 UTC

Awww, baby Ivy is sweet...I love how you depict Gail's feelings in this piece - that mix of love and not a little fear, that she might do something wrong, screw it up somehow. It's very realistic and heartwarming at the same time.
Nice job!

bookblather June 7 2011, 05:08:33 UTC

Thank you very much! I figured fear and uncertainty would not be out of character nor strange, and they're not bad things, really, so long as she recognizes and understands them. Thank you.