Comments | runaway_tales: chocolate and strawberry with fresh strawberries

ninablues in runaway_tales

chocolate and strawberry with fresh strawberries

Jan 03, 2011 22:05

Story: Timeless { backstory | index }
Title: At A Loss
Rating: G
Challenge: Chocolate #2: rivalry/jealousy, Strawberry #30: pillow
Toppings/Extras: fresh strawberries
Wordcount: 454
Summary: Verity Ashdown feels that she is losing her husband to Pia Rees.
Notes: This angle was surprisingly fun. Fresh strawberries: a scene from the Oscar Wilde play ( Read more... )

[extra] fresh fruit : strawberries, [inactive-author] ninablues, [challenge] chocolate, [challenge] strawberry

Comments 13

bookblather January 4 2011, 05:35:32 UTC

Poor Verity. They're just friends, sweetheart! They're friends who sit around and make fun of movies and hit each other with pillows. *hugs her* I hope she manages to find that sort of relationship with Ashdown or somebody, because everybody needs a friend like that. I feel so bad for her here. Great job.

hi_falootin January 4 2011, 07:20:17 UTC

I also feel bad for Verity...she's so on the outside looking in :/ I can see her maybe being a little jealous of their close bond even if she knew there was nothing romantic going on. Ashdown seems to be a bit clueless to all of this, of course!

sarcasticsra January 4 2011, 11:40:06 UTC

Very interesting! Verity is both sympathetic and not here, which is tricky to pull off well, but you did with aplomb.

I also love Ashdown and Pia's easy friendship. It seems sweet. :)

Nice work!

niee87 January 6 2011, 21:23:17 UTC

I like how you gave us both sides, as other people have said. I don't always like Verity but I find I can often see her side of the story and that makes me feel for her, either good or bad. She's a really sympathetic character a lot of the time but her ways of dealing with it are not in the slightest a lot of the time :P Also, want to see even more Pia and Ashdown!