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Prompt 18 (Fix You)

Jan 18, 2007 16:59

Title: Fix You
Author: Devonwood
Format & Word Count: Double Drabble; 200
Rating: PG
Prompt: Prompt 18 (Coldplay lyrics)
Warning: None, really
Summary: Today, you are mouse brown in looks and grey in emotion.
Author's Note: Oh, Remus and Tonks. Why must I make you so emo? Also, in case anyone didn't notice, I'm trying to use every single prompt. So far ( Read more... )

devonwood, prompt 18

Comments 10

jadeddiva January 19 2007, 01:33:25 UTC

Nice little vignette.

devonwood January 19 2007, 03:42:55 UTC

Thank you! :)

shimotsuki January 19 2007, 02:30:14 UTC

Ooo. I take it Tonks doesn't know that Remus is there? I hope not...I like the idea of him seeing exactly how low she's feeling, when she doesn't think that anyone is watching.

No, especially not those words. *grabs him by the collar and shakes* (Oh, wait, it's Tonks that gets to do that.)

devonwood January 19 2007, 03:44:24 UTC

Ooo. I take it Tonks doesn't know that Remus is there?

Yeah, he's kind of mysteriously lurking in the shadows. :)

Thanks for the review! I think we'd all like to shake a little sense into him. :D

lady_bracknell January 19 2007, 12:33:37 UTC

I really liked the idea of Remus watching Tonks from afar, seeing the effect he's had, wanting to fix it, and yet not quite being able to find it within himself to do so, and I thought your characterisation of Tonks in the first para was spot on - she's down, obviously, but not out - she's still got enough fire to shoot the barman a glare, which is exactly how I imagine her during HBP.

Kudos to you for attempting all the prompts, too :).

devonwood January 19 2007, 20:58:47 UTC

Thank you for the review! Tonks shouldn't be the only one to watch from a distance. :)

Kudos to you for attempting all the prompts, too :).

I'm starting to regret that now, as I don't really have another solid plot idea until a few prompts from now. =D

phe_o January 21 2007, 04:57:34 UTC

Nice job; I love the "more than a pint" line. ;)

devonwood January 21 2007, 22:48:11 UTC

Writing about seedy bartenders always gives me a chuckle. :D

Thanks for the review!

jncar January 22 2007, 17:01:03 UTC

I like how you cover the scene from both points of view.

You know it is your fault- everything is your fault, it seems-

This thought seems so typical for HBP-Remus.

Nice little drabble.

devonwood January 23 2007, 01:47:02 UTC

HBP-Remus is so moody. :D

Thanks for the review!