LJ Idol Week 13: Open Topic

[rswndrlst]

Baby This Will Only End In Tragedy

You meet me in the park at midnight and in the darkness when we see the stars you say, “See. I told you that they were there all along.” But the skeptic in me tells you, “You only see them because you want to, because you have been told to.”

When you left, I used to pile the extra pillows next to me on the bed

Comments

[missbinary]

This is very well written! The descriptions are very strong.

[catwomon]

This is good, if a bit troubling.

[i_17bingo]

This kind of passion, it... I don't know... seeps through you like wine on your shirt. You can't get rid of it, no matter how hard you try. And this metaphor goes double for me, because I love wine, but I cant be trusted to drink it without someone (mostly me) getting hurt.

[halfshellvenus]

Beautiful and so sad-- because with the fist to the cheekbone, you get the feeling that things are not always good between these two, and yet the narrator's obsessive sense that this is the only true happiness prevents her from escaping this state.