LJ Idol 10: Week 14: Topic 4: Nevermind

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[Possibly NSFW, warnings under cut]

Allusions to sex work, including descriptions of consentual wax play and drug use


They Say Beyond The City Walls There Are No Cameras

I duck into the alley behind The Parsonage, pressing my hand against the bleeding wound and trying to hold back gasping coughs.

“Janie you look like-”

“I gotta see her Tony.”

“She’s in number ten tonight but-”

I don’t

Comments

[i_17bingo]

What I like most about this is the style--short, clipped, and really hard-boiled. This was a fun read, and it has me curious for more.

[tonithegreat]

I really enjoyed this, and I'm curious about your people here. A noir feel, but also somehow western-ish. Beautifully done in a short piece!

[rayaso]

Very nicely done! In a dystopian society, why not candles? This had a great feel to it. I agree -- very Western and noir. I was glad to see that "I know a guy" survives. I liked the explanation at the end as well, for the context.

[murielle]

A very compelling read, right from the start. Completely engaging! Kudos!

[bleodswean]

This is sharp and immediate and feels very, very much in your control! Your world building is complicated without losing the reader. I love the idea of the saints!!! Your first person POV is refreshing and engaging. Great job with this!