LJ Idol 10: Week 6: Heel-Turn

[rswndrlst]

The Few Will Become Many

To save the people of Earth, The Few must join as one.
The Final City will rise from the ashes of the old world.
All among the few who have survived The Final War and swear allegiance to The Final City will be become a part of the whole and reside in adherence to the Law of Conformity.
This is the Final Great Act of

Comments

[eternal_ot]

Ah! Superb twist, just when I was wondering where is this leading me. Nice read. Loved the poem at the start forms the crux of your story. Great Job!
Well written.

[rswndrlst]

Thanks for reading!! I am super worried it's too long but really glad the format works!

[rayaso]

Great twist, great story. You packed a lot into this, and it read very well. Very nicely told!

[rswndrlst]

Thank you so much!

[halfshellvenus]

I felt so for this character, betrayed by someone who went so far out of his way to deceive her and went on to deceive and destroy the whole world later on.

There was suitable dystopian creepiness in the new society's version of ideals, enough to make you feel glad that there is a rebellion and that it is succeeding.

[rswndrlst]

Thank you for stopping by!!
I want to believe he really loved her once but then bought into his own self righteousness. I am glad I succeded in making the Final City society creepy enough to make you want to root for the rebellion! Thanks again for reading!

[ryl]

I admire the narrator's spunk and especially how it all worked out for her in the end. That's what you get for being an evil overlord, Mikey!

[rswndrlst]

haha yes! down with evil overlords! and thank you for reading

[m_malcontent]

Nice world building

[rswndrlst]

thank you that means a lot to me!