LJ Idol 10: Week 3: Brushback pitch

[rswndrlst]

The Begining of The End,
or It's All Just a Matter of Time

1am
The words trip over her tongue.
They wash out into the space between them
Hitting her target slightly left of the center.
She’s smiling;
Blowing hot air over her fingernails
and buffing them on her lapel.
It’s a brush-back pitch,
A challenge,
A dare,
A psych out,
She’s redefining their boundaries.

Comments

[halfshellvenus]

I can see how something more combative than cooperative might rise up between two people as it did here. When you fight, you know you're alive, at least for a while.

[murielle]

Everything else aside, this is just a great poem. So glad you wrote it, even more glad you shared it, and look embedded prompt makes sense within the cotext of the poem. A win any way you look at it. Kudos!

[my_name_is_jenn]

I really enjoyed reading this. Very nice pace and flow to it.

[uselesstinrelic]

I can't honestly say that I felt I really understood what was happening here (poetry and all its associated imagery doesn't come to me easily,) but I appreciated the flow and the ease. Even if poetry isn't usually my jam, I can absolutely tell when a poem is skillfully crafted. There's an ease to it that yours has and I appreciate your talent with words.