LJ Idol 10: Week 3: Brushback pitch

[rswndrlst]

The Begining of The End,
or It's All Just a Matter of Time

1am
The words trip over her tongue.
They wash out into the space between them
Hitting her target slightly left of the center.
She’s smiling;
Blowing hot air over her fingernails
and buffing them on her lapel.
It’s a brush-back pitch,
A challenge,
A dare,
A psych out,
She’s redefining their boundaries.

Comments

[eeyore_grrl]

this is beautiful.

[eternal_ot]

Amazing take! loved the play of words here.Superb.

[sinnamongirl]

Thank you for your entry!

[tonithegreat]

My favorite part was:

The pain lies (so many lies) in the dust particles
floating on the sound waves
contextualized between them.

To me, this was familiar words-swords territory. I really liked your word weaving here!

[penpusher]

sports isn't relegated to simply athletic competition, as you prove with this piece! I like the feisty elements between these two combatants as they go about the business of testing each other's resolve and limits.