fic: concomitant for cevennes

[oh_peccadillo]

Title: Concomitant
Author/Artist: oh_peccadillo
Recipient: cevennes
Rating: R
Contents or warnings (highlight to view): *mild sexual content, language, & recreational drug use*
Word count: 1960
Summary: a lie low in Los Angeles, oneiromancy
Notes: ty cevennes for the imagination-sparking prompts & giving me a reason + a way to write about la, spencerq for everything as always, & zambla for

Comments

[museinabsentia]

If this wasn't just the most bittersweet thing. I love the ide air them hiding out in the states fora while. And the dream book was incredibly clever. Your dream witch, too, was fabulous. Oh, but the ache of what was missing, and how fragile they still are together. This was simply lovely.

[ruinsplume]

This was gorgeous, dreamlike in execution as well as in subject. I loved your use of language, and the experimental flavor of the piece, which I don't see very much of in fanfic. So many gorgeous observations that absolutely capture LA as well--the pineapples that smell like alcohol (yes, exactly!), the coyotes on the outskirts, the "veering off the freeway to climb the neighborhood" (I saw and felt Los Felices there) the sex in the car WHILE DRIVING (which seems so quintessentially LA). I loved your deep attention to sensual detail throughout. It made for a read that was both intense and intensely quiet.

[oh_peccadillo]

Ahhh thank you. I’ve been yelling for weeks (has it been weeks?) about how much I enjoy and appreciate the representation of adult sexuality + relationships in “A Taste of Ginger” and in “Circle.” Also that moment in Circle where Sirius is like, standing there and loses it a little bit all literally like “Aghh--”. It pleases me SO MUCH. Have been meaning to tell you and am telling you now. <333

The last time I was in fandom like 12 years ago (?!), there was this weird experimental edge to the little corner I was reading in and apparently those folks also wrote HP and that was kind of the route I took to get here in September/October.

YES THOSE EXACT PINEAPPLES !!!! !!!!!!!!! !

[ruinsplume]

Oh, thank you for your kind comments about "Circle" and "Ginger." I like writing and reading Marauders' era stuff too, but since I'm kinda old myself now, If ind that there's something very satisfying about writing them as adults and figuring out what it means to write older people in a sexual and sexy way.

I haven't read much experimental HP fic (which is the only fandom I read in). Maybe you can rec me some stuff? Especially if it's got an R or E rating--it's the combination of sexual and emotional dynamics that draws me to reading and writing in this fandom.

RE the pineapples: that was one of those moments where the writer (in this case, you) hit on a description that was so accurate I couldn't believe I"d never thought of it that way before. A similar moment occurred for me when Nabokov describes hot chocolate as having a pinkish cast to it. Because it *totally* does!

[oh_peccadillo]

I like writing and reading Marauders' era stuff too, but since I'm kinda old myself now, If ind that there's something very satisfying about writing them as adults and figuring out what it means to write older people in a sexual and sexy way.

I just enjoy this thought so much and I have more thoughts and feelings about it than I thought I had, basically. re: recs - I get that re: R, E. I'll retrace my path and see what I find!!

[cevennes]

ohhhhh wow, THANK YOU!!! So many things I want to tell you I loved and I'm going to hone in on the car sex immediately because it is DIVINE and reading it was like getting a gift you've wanted for so long but never expected to open, and I can't thank you enough for that <3 All of this is so hazy-dreamy-heady from minute one but I think my favorite bits are all the pieces of driving all around LA. I love it when people put these two in unexpected places and you've woven them into the meat of it seamlessly; like I always get the feeling that they're living at the very edges of both worlds here, and in itself it feels dreamlike and hallucinatory in all these gorgeous, intricate ways

[oh_peccadillo]

I'm so glad to hear that re: the car sex. I had been in conversation about how far or explicit to take it bc to me in this reading of them, the fragility of (re)connecting is so present and central, and depicting graphic sex or orgasm seemed to pull away from that. The idea that the stakes are lower in the car bc the focus isn't necessarily on making Remus come. That just the physicality at all would be a wide enough gap to bridge. I think about Sirius’s vulnerability and courage in that moment and all the sensation physical and emotional Remus would be handling, and how really him driving would not like, mitigate the intensity but would contain it enough to allow for it. Car time being a site of possibility for the liminal.

like I always get the feeling that they're living at the very edges of both worlds here
Mm. All the stuff you said about this era, yes. Yes.

I'd read a novel about your dream witch!!!I’d write a short one!!! Come tell me what you'd read about her

[mindabbles]

The feeling of a dream is so present through all of this. Them being out of their usual place and your lovely descriptions really added to it as well. There's a real bittersweet feel to this that comes through in the way you used words and phrases. Really interesting and enjoyable read.

[brighty18]

Oh, this was just... just. Just gorgeous. Just moving. Just lovely. Just perfect. It was original and truly beautifully crafted. It rather made my day.

As someone who grew-up in LA, I have to say that you captured the feelings as well as the physicality of it. The colors and sounds and sense of hazy brightness all rang incredibly true. I especially loved the bit about the coyotes and the transformation.

And this bit.
“Didn’t you want a pineapple?” Remus says. “Sirius--go pick one out.”

So between his palms, the heft and prickling weight of a pineapple. Then another. Greens, browns, yellows. A sort of alcohol fragrance. Tufts of mold on some bottoms. Their little hats. What a perfect description of pineapples.

And the dream book and accompanying witch were perfect and such a great touch.

Great story!

[oh_peccadillo]

Ahhh thank you. Originality and craft are important to me, so that means a lot. !!

I'm so glad the like, LA-ness came through and rang true for you. It felt really, really good to write and be all saturated with memories and feelings of just like, sensory place detail. I struggled some around the coyotes and the transformation bit -- it kept feeling kind of weak. So it's a nice surprise that it's especially loved.