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Day Nineteen - Fic: Team Canon: A-like Singing the Blues

Oct 19, 2010 09:41

Team: Team Canon
Title: A-like Singing the Blues
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Genre(s): Angst
Word Count: 1756
Summary: As the war slowly came to consume their lives, "London Calling" were two words neither of them ever wanted to hear.
Notes: Special thanks to R. for beta-ing this.
Prompt: 8

( A-Like Singing the Blues )

team canon, rs_games 2010, fic

Comments 28

carmentakoshi October 22 2010, 03:42:34 UTC

Gorgeous and haunting. The short scenes hit hard, the abrupt end even harder. The structure of this conveys the feelings of deep despair of the First War more effectively than most any fic I have ever read! Bravo!

phiso_kun November 22 2010, 03:22:54 UTC

Thank you SO much! o///o I was so worried about this when I submitted it, so I'm really glad to see it worked for you. :D You are too sweet~ <3

deathjunke October 22 2010, 05:19:17 UTC

Wow, i hadnt expected this at all. Even the opening part seemed to be a little lighthearted but this fic so wasnt. There is some serious emotion here. and i can only wish that i could give the boys a hug. because after this they need one. *hugs boys.....hugs author too :3*

phiso_kun November 22 2010, 03:24:24 UTC

*HUGS*

Thank you for the wonderful comment! :D Yeah, it started out lighter than I had originally expected it to, but I think that's how the entire situation was for them. I'm glad you think it worked, because I was worried it'd come off badly. XD

Thanks again!

mieystrapurore October 22 2010, 10:22:08 UTC

You wrote the prompt in very well. I like the idea of London calling being code for the Order. The slow breakdown of Remus and Sirius' relationship was very well written, I felt for Remus at the end.

phiso_kun November 22 2010, 03:26:08 UTC

Thank you very much! :D <3 I appreciate the comment. ^^

remuslives23 October 30 2010, 07:59:53 UTC

The hopelessness and despair was just palpable through the whole fic. Watching their relationship deteriorate, becoming more and more poisonous, was devastating.

This:
It would take several tries for Remus to coax him out of bed, each time taking longer than the last. Finally, Remus would leave Sirius there, his heart constricted in anxiety as he went on his own and waited for Sirius to follow.

He didn't know what he would do if Sirius ever chose to stop coming after him.... broke my damn heart.

phiso_kun November 22 2010, 03:27:55 UTC

Waaai~

Thank you so much! >////< <3 You flatter me!

werewolfsfan November 2 2010, 00:21:58 UTC

No matter how many times I read about the First War and the suspicions mounting with the Order's losses, it never fails to hurt. But as another has already said, your telling of that familiar story is unforgettable.
I found your description of how each of the Marauders reacted to their first order meeting vivid and insightful. I thought that would be the most lasting image but each vignette resonated so well. My tension mounted along with the boys for boys they were. So very young. Canon stories like this make the fact that they had a chance to be reunited later seem like a happy ending.

phiso_kun November 22 2010, 03:32:19 UTC

The First War is almost always painful, but it's such an integral part of our puppies' lives that I don't think any of us could ever really step away from it completely. You're right, though; it makes the end of PoA seem so much happier in comparison. :)

Thank you for the lovely comment. <3