Day 15 - Team Moon - Fic: annual honesty

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Moon
Title: annual honesty
Rating: pg-13
Warnings: canonical character death, swearing
Word Count: 17,652
Summary:

"Are you sure?" Sirius says, slowly.

"Yeah," Remus says. "My parents loved you at the dinner party last summer. Thought you were a right little aristocrat."

Notes: thanks to J for the beta!!
Prompt: 60 - "Ad astra per aspera

Comments

[bookgrrrl2006]

sirius needs to watch that movie labyrinth to see that david bowie really is a wizard.

this was an astoundingly good read. i would have loved it even it were not about wizards or about my two favorite wizards. it was just that good. you have an amazing way of making reference to the past, the kids going out to see the aurora borealis, the plants growing in remus's childhood driveway, james's and remus's dads and their old, scratchy wizard songs, that just makes it all so lovely. it reads like a good short story in an anthology, the kind that makes you wish it were a novel because you love the universe so much.

you are also a master at dialog. your boys were witty and funny, but they were also very real. they sounded like actual boys: confused, annoying, picking on each other, but still close and in love. it was great.

your take on remus is also totally on fleek. This passage especially rang true for me: at hogwarts, he’d found it hard to make friends in the first term. he had a strange, erratic prior knowledge. he knew all

[cevennes]

Oh god, this is staggering, and gut-wrenching, and a thousand different kinds of beautiful. The lead-up and premise of the prank is incredibly original and heartbreakingly perfect, and your prose is astounding; what beautiful language and characterization, from the first down to the last. Your Remus is dead-on, and I love how Sirius is a bit brittle here, but still warm, still wanting. I'm a little speechless at how moving and evocative this entire piece is; what a gem of writing.

[museinabsentia]

This was just incredibly good. All the right pain and heartache and the entire concept. What a creative reasoning behind the prank. And your slightly fluctuating use of time made it all the more gave the entire thing a sort of crystalline memory feel, the sort of memory that's so sharp it's almost brittle, but following your brain through all it's different permutations which are frequently not chronological.

And this:
“It’s just,” Remus said, his voice faltering in the dark. It would be easier if he could see his face. “It would be so difficult.”

“Remus,” Sirius said. His voice sounded thick, and tired. “It was just a kiss. I’m trying to sleep.”Sirius being so resolute in the fact that it didn't matter. All the usual aches and pains of this pair were in here, but that moment really stood out to me as truly painful. The sort of pain that didn't come from the war and what the world threw at them, but of their own making, and that's always much worse

[bearshorty]

You weave in and out of time periods so easily with wonderful transitions - I was never lost and the whole story flowed so well. And all the time periods are gorgeous. I liked it all from Remus' inner thought, to Sirius' first movie to discussion of Legimency. My favorite parts were Sirius and Remus under the covers, talking and eating, and just being close. And the parallel of them lying in bed with their heads touching in the beginning and in the end.

I really like your Remus - a year older, and much more complex than he is usually presented.

The fraught years ahead lap at their ankles like waves, and foam, and the sea beyond.
This sentence was beautiful. Gorgeous. My favorite one.

[huldrejenta]

What a gorgeous piece of writing this is! When I first started reading this, it felt like a soft blanket to sink into or wrap around myself. And then I continued, getting swept away by all the twists and turns - and it felt like gentle winds carrying me this way and that way, always knowing where they were going, always leading me through the landscape they were covering. I adore your descriptions and your language, dear MA, how you're able to make me so emotional without using big words or grand gestures. This is a story to be read slowly, savouring every word. Wonderful! ♥