Day 6 - Team Magic: Fic: Oh, We Lost Magic

[rsgamesmods]

Team: Magic
Title: Oh, We Lost Magic
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: none
Word Count: ~4000
Summary: The year is 1985 and Sirius, Remus, James and Lily are working as EMTs in muggle London, living seemingly normal lives...except there's really an awful lot of weird things going on.
Notes: AU where nobody dies. Betaed by the lovely M, whose suggestions and

Comments

[leontinabowie]

I loved this fic :)

The story was so interesting, and I love how you could feel the disconnected emotions they were all feeling. There was a strong sense of magic in the story, even when they weren't in the magical world.

Sirius and Remus had a lovely relationship. It was full of banter and lightness, but with a nice balance of endearment and tenderness. I also liked the relationship between the two of them and the Potters. It was a nice glimpse into what their life would have been like if they had survived.

[nerak_rose]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I was really going for a feeling of disconnect, but i also wanted the casual ease of their relationships to shine through. :D

[bearshorty]

From the very beginning I just wanted to keep reading to see the solution to the mystery - you created a great atmosphere and I was right there with the characters. I really liked Remus' sense of "realness", especially when he kissed Sirius and knew that it felt right. Really interesting and original concept here.

[nerak_rose]

Thank you! :D I hope the solution didn't disappoint. :)

[cevennes]

I really love the premise of this (EMTs are rad and this is so wickedly clever), and I was itching to know what was going on until the very end! You've thrown a lightheartedness into a terrifying situation that settles into something unique and utterly brilliant--it all works so well together. The dialogue is hilarious even in the worst situations, and I love the way they keep catching fleeting glimpses of what their lives really were and are through the spell; Sirius kissing Remus and both of them realizing how right and real it feels was an especially nice touch, and James and Lily and Harry were so much fun to read. Knowing it's all over at the end and they'll all get to move on together was so, so wonderful, oh gosh. And I know I said it already, but your dialogue! I still can't get over how good it is and what a great dynamic they've got, you did such an incredible job I had to repeat myself. This was a blast and a half to read, just, WOW, I love this! You took an amazing concept and hit it all the way to the moon.

[nerak_rose]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I love writing dialogue and especially between good friends/people who know each other very well, and I definitely wanted that lightheartedness to counter all the dark! :D

[museinabsentia]

This was such a creative idea. Truly original and brilliantly done. I love how you can feel the magic in everything that isn't there. The magic just spilling out of them all and terrifying them. That must be, on some level, what it's like to be a muggle parent to a witch or wizard, only it's happen to themselves. Watching them struggle with it, and to align themselves with the ripples in reality every time it happened. James remembering Peter, Sirius waking up as Padfoot, Remus suddenly knowing that he and Sirius had been together and James knowing it, too. It was truly wonderful. Their relationship was so strong that it couldn't be forgotten even with the memory modification.

And despite the weird reality that they didn't quite fit into they still managed to be themselves. the banter was wonderful, and completely in character, and I loved the part about Friday being the day that Sirius asked Remus out every week. That is such a Sirius thing to do. And of course this:
"I imagine once they discover your furry side, they'

[nerak_rose]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. I love writing dialogue and especially between these two, so I'm glad it worked. i wanted it to show that they were trying to function in a world that didn't work for them. :D

[abyss_valkyrie]

I actually shivered a little,reading this.What a feeling,so eerie and so well done,love the atmosphere of isolation they're in,it's so perfect for the prompt.

I was all like, whaaat,noo,how could they forget them being together? And then Remus says that kissing Sirius felt real,wooooowowowoww!! :) Great fic here, great setting and really chilling. I'm so glad James and Lily were here,seriously good going with them and the tight-knit friendship they had. And they were all so in character,it was brilliant!!

[nerak_rose]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :D