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[Pinstripes] Wolf

Nov 28, 2009 19:59

Title: Wolf
Story/Character: Pinstripes / Seth, Elijah
Rating: PG-13 (violence)
word count: 1,587

Written for the brigits_flame prompt of "guns".

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( The Ancestors were weeping in the Heavens, bitter ice tears dashed down against the earth below where frozen bits clattered against brick and steel with the sound of rattled bones. )

fic:scene, story:pinstripes

Comments 15

Edit #2-summary pelethetart December 6 2009, 05:56:56 UTC

I think this is a really good piece ( ... )

Re: Edit #2-summary darthneko December 6 2009, 14:28:23 UTC

WOW! Thank you so very much for this edit, I really appreciate the line by line breakdown! ^_^ Thank you for taking the time to round up all my extra commas. I know I'm bad about run on sentences but this was worse than most; I was right down to the wire and didn't have a chance to read it over. ^_^'' The suggestions are all great, I'll be using them when I have a chance to spruce this up, and I'm really glad you liked it.