Taipei travels fic :D
Aaah, so many prompts, I was only able to complete three, but here they are. No guarantees on the quality, and they kinda...went longer than I thought they would. Anyhow, I'm requesting, no, begging for any concrit you have. Spelling issues, coherent sentence and pronoun issues, characterisation issues (ajfoara especially those, I'm worried about
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&hearts &hearts & hearts!
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Aaaaaaaaarrrrrrrgh! I swore I would wait until class was over to reward myself . . . but I didn't wait ^^"
I love these--actually, I just tried to pick one as a favorite, but couldn't ^^" Though I am now humming Happiness and resolve to through xiaolongbao randomly into all of my jpop songs jut for the hell of it, so it might win. But aimiyamoto(!) I can't even tell you how awesome it is that you did that one&hearts! And Sakuraiba homecoming was hilarious! Who to feel worse for? Aiba or Sho? The tiger gifts were awesome, as was the fact that Sho almost dodged successfully \o ( ... )
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I'm sorry it took me so long to respond, m'dear. ^^;;;; Eeeeeee, I'm glad that you like it. #^_^#
Happiness is such an earworm. orz
The tiger gifts were awesome, as was the fact that Sho almost dodged successfully \o/
Well, this is Sho, right? Almost is the key word. (heh, at least he's not Leader, or there would have been incidental severe injury) Hee, I'm happy that you caught that. And doesn't Sho mention all the time that Aiba brings back tiger things for everyone? XD He said on that Oshareism that he's got a pile of t-shirts. XDDDD
Edit has been made; please please please let me know if you notice other things (though, hehe, this isn't that good, so I won't make you read it again. :P)
#2 is...one that I'm thinking about. But the way the pattern goes, that means that part 3 would be in Nino's POV if I'm continuing that conceit, and I'm not sure I'm...evilly creative enough to get into his head properly. Also I have the sinking feeling that way lies porn. Or thwarting ( ... )
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Sho laughed ruefully and looked down at Ohno's tugging, who'd apparently received some telepathic message from Nino. "Come on, Sho-kun, let's go get some ramen," Ohno said peaceably. "We'll bring some back for you three," he said, pulling Sho along by the arm down the hallway.
Aiba heard Sho mutter, "Three? Ohno-kun, what about--" before they disappeared around a corner.
Poor lonely befuddled!Sho^^" all left out and clueless>_<
Or thwarting, but that would mean glares of bloody death from all sides (or pouting from Aiba for being denied, which might be worse). True. I think Aiba's pout might be more devastating, but that may just be the selfishness talking ( ... )
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Where do I even begin? First, the Aiba/Jun/Nino, which was awesome and fun and hot and NEEDS TO BE CONTINUED. REALLY, PLEAAAAAASE.
And the xiaolongbao snippet was seriously SO DAMN CUTE. The Happiness/Xiaolongbao song is totally my canon. ♥
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I actually don't quite remember WHAT I requested, but I don't care, because this was SO GOOD. Honestly, I can so see these hijinks happening!
And Aiba! I really loved this:
Aiba was practically vibrating out of his seat on the bus - Aiba had graduated to bouncing in his seat - Aiba curled in on himself, wriggled and jumped up
-Aiba works so much with his body language and you've captured this really well.
Also, this exchange cracked me up SO MUCH:
Ohno smiled at them all, "Let's eat!"
"That's it? 'Let's eat'?" Sho asked in disbelief.
"It sums it up, now c'mon, food!" said Nino.
Trust Nino to be on Ohno's page again. XD
That other two ficlets were also amazing! I especially loved the mentions of "Nino's amazing similarity to a limpet" in the first one. XDD And the way Sho immediately assumes that he's in trouble when he hears Jun saying his name. And, especially, this:
"Sho-kun was inconsolable," Ohno said soothingly ( ... )
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Of course I can't not mention Ohno and Nino's telepathic connection. XD And fail!Sho is kind of one of my favorite types of Sho, ehehe.
Mmm, xiaolongbao.
♥ ♥ ♥
Oh, um. P.S.? I know you've got your own fic going, so definitely feel free to refuse, it's just that one of the prompts I was working on kind of...ballooned out of control so now I want someone to sanity check it and suchlike before I release it into the wild. Um, let me know? It's here, locked. ^^;;;
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I love your Aiba, he's a great mix of cheerful and something more serious, the way he and Nino just feed each other is great and I am ALL FOR MOAR PLZ. IT NEEDS TO BE CONTINUED. :D :D :D
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...If I can figure out what Aiba and Nino want to do to Jun SPECIFICALLY, it shall be continued. Getting Jun's reactions will be no problem :|b But getting inside Nino's brain....>.> Suggestions for things you want to see done to Jun happen?
Eeeeeeeeee I'm glad you like it. ^_____^
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