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renisanz

fic: Back Home [pt.13]

Apr 03, 2009 16:51

TITLE: Back Home - Pt. 13
AUTHOR: renisanz
SUMMARY: Settling down won't be easy for either of them. A sequel to “Making Up the Past.” Ronon/Keller.
CATEGORY: Romance/Drama
RATING: PG-13
WORDS: 1,331
BETA: journeyman07
SPOILERS: None.
DISCLAIMER: I don't own 'em, but they're fun to play, not for profit.

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( Well, you're waiting at the door )

fan: fic, series: making up the past, pairing: ronon/keller, character: ronon dex, character: jennifer keller, fandom: sga

Comments 11

tardiscalling84 April 3 2009, 23:52:28 UTC

The conversations in this chapter rock. But this? This is the best line.

“Oh, she said something about catching a bug on her way here. By the sound of it, I'm pretty positive there's some small organism nesting inside her.”

And not just because of who said it, either. ;)

You are awesome, my dear. You just are.

renisanz April 4 2009, 00:53:45 UTC

Thanks. :)

I was hoping y'all would be ok with a character driven chapter. This has been sitting on my computer, unfinished, for weeks, and I was recently inspired enough to press on. The events very nearly went a different way, but I decided to put off Jen telling her dad about ...everything, for a bit longer. :)

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renisanz April 5 2009, 03:38:57 UTC

Thank you. :)

seren_ccd April 6 2009, 08:20:12 UTC

I love this story! Your style of writing is lovely and the relationship between Ronon and Jennifer is very thoughtful and believable. I cannot wait to hear the conversation between Jen and her dad!

renisanz April 6 2009, 20:02:22 UTC

Thank you so much. I've been working on this story for over a year now, so it's good to get new feedback, letting me know it still reads as well as in the beginning. :)

theporchlife April 8 2009, 12:34:27 UTC

So great to read some more of this story! Rachel is still one of my favorite original characters ever and I love Ronon's hesitation at Rachel's description of herself as a "genius". And I love that she says "dude" a lot (it's totally one of my favorite words, haha). Great update! :)

renisanz April 8 2009, 20:28:55 UTC

Thanks. It's fun to write someone markedly less inhibited than Jennifer. :) I can imagine the face Ronon makes whenever Rachel calls him "dude." :P

sezjara April 10 2009, 04:58:17 UTC

Yay!!!!!!!! You updated!!!!!!! I'm so glad!!!!!!!!

Good chapter.

I like Rachel. She seems to be very nice, and very up front. I hope she'll get to stick around for a while.

Of course, he'll go right for the Krispy Kreme. I would , too. LOL

And Aunt Jo, well, at least she's honest! LOL.

The suspense is killing me here, I hope you can update again soon. You're doing really well, and I'm looking forward to her dad's reaction to not only Ronon, but her pregnancy as well. I should provide for some great entertainment.

Good job reni!!!!

renisanz April 10 2009, 21:40:15 UTC

Thanks.

So sorry to keep you waiting, but one thing I've learned is that I can't rush things with this story, as much as I want to be done with the thing. It's also because I don't really know how Jen's dad will react yet. Also, I've been wanting to explore little character moments. I'm pretty sure Jen's dad will find out sometime before the babies are born. ;)