Never Spoken, Never Forgotten by Lavinia Lavender

[lavinialavender]

Title: Never Spoken, Never Forgotten
Author: Lavinia Lavender
Summary:  Obstacles are finally out of the way, and the inevitable happens. Remus/Lily
Rating: PG for making-out
Warnings: kissing!
Word Count: 1,441
Author’s Note: My prompts were First Visit Home, Sloth (...it's kinda hard to see, I'm afraid) and the lyrics: Trees held us in on all

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

So pleased you decided to brave the waters and post your first challenge fic, because this is a really lovely little vignette.

I really liked the slightly melencholy tone you gave Lily, I really did sense that the world they live in is taking it's toll, and I liked how they didn't need to talk about it.

My favourite bit was the joke about Petunia coming downstairs to see how or if wizards slept - that would have made a great fic on it's own.

Nicely done :).

[lavinialavender]

Aww, thank you for commenting nicely. I really am hoping my next ones will be better, now that I got the first out of the way.

[shimotsuki]

This story does a lovely job showing an easy friendship between Remus and Lily, and the gentle naturalness of a kiss between friends that might lead to something more. The kiss itself, especially coming out of Lily's reaction to Remus looking sad, was very sweet.

I liked this:
"...But when I’m alone - with one person, I mean - and it just doesn’t matter, then I don’t worry about it."
Remus looked down at her, absorbing the feeling of being oddly touched.

I also like the way you plant the story securely in the context of the times, showing these two responsible people worrying about what their world is coming to.

[lavinialavender]

Awww, thank you! I'm so glad it worked and made sense for you.

[bratanimus]

Sorry for the delay in reviewing! I'm just now catching up on the last few fics posted. :)

First off, I really liked this, and I'm so glad you posted it! I thought you really captured a very teenage interaction between Remus and Lily, with her not knowing at first what, exactly, she thinks they should talk about, and then her rambling on, and Remus just sort of accepting that. ;)

Loved the reminders of the times in which they live, the world into which they will be heading soon, and how any one of them might be so drastically affected by What’s Going On. *shudder*

I adored Remus' uncertainty: “I don’t know what I want to do. I know I’ve talked about teaching or doing whatever James and Sirius suggest, but - I really don’t know. I don’t think any of that’s going to work out. I almost know it’s not going to. And - I just don’t know.” This is at once very teenage and very Remus.

And Lily's simple, abrupt honesty: “You sounded so sad when you said that.” Lovely bit of characterization there

[lavinialavender]

Ohh, thanks so much for reviewing! I'm delighted you liked it and thought it worked so well. Yes, I particularly liked Remus not really knowing what he was going to do, with being a werewolf and all.

Thank you for the characterisation compliment - Lily's my original favorite character, though I've had others mount up pretty high, but I'm glad I still know her. And yes, the word choice in your last quote was important. It's such a relief when readers shows they understand the point you're trying to get across. Thank you!

[bloodrebel333]

Oh - I like this, much more than the other things of yours I've read.

[lavinialavender]

*stares in astonishment*

...Thank you. Thank you very much.

*returns to black belt story*