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I am Responsible for My Rose (2/27)

May 02, 2005 14:37

Title: I am Responsible for My Rose
Author: Lilian_Cho
Pairing: Can be read as H/D
Genre: Gen
Rating: G, won’t get higher than PG-13
Length: Chapter two of twenty-seven=1100+ words.
Complete?: WIP. Chapter one and two is up.
Summary: a Harry Potter adaptation of Antoine de Saint-Exupéry’s The Little Prince, told from Severus Snape’s point of view
Warnings: ( Read more... )

general, harry, lilian_cho, gen, anyone, snape, no pairing

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tesseract_5 May 3 2005, 20:35:36 UTC

Hi Lilian, you might have guessed by now, but crossovers and very long chaptered Works in Progress are both a turnoff for some, and difficult to do here at this community. We've had some authors post several chapters in a row, with little response except on the first post. This community works better for asking about general large issue questions, rather than as a beta. HP_betas and your group for this fic work better.

Please don't take this note as a mod saying don't post here, au contraire, posting your own and commenting on other stories is very welcome from anyone. I just wanted to try to explain why you got feedback on the first chapter and not on this one.

one nitpick :) I looked into my bag of personal tea blend. seems awkward to me, perhaps "I looked into the bag of tea I had personally blended." or "I looked into my bag of individually blended tea." ?

lilian_cho May 3 2005, 20:56:00 UTC

Alright, thanks :-) I'll post only one-shots here then.

Thanks for the tea blend nitpick. Will tinker on it more.

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lilian_cho May 5 2005, 02:51:11 UTC

>>>>>I do intend to review this chapter fairly thoroughly

Thanks :-) I will only post one-shots of this universe from now on.

>>>>>I've got questions that relate to the AU nature of the fic and how far out of Potterverse it will or won't be.

The overarching plot and timeline will firmly follow the Little Prince. The HP characters, however, will hopefully stay IC as much as possible. (Think Sam's characters in the AU Laocoon's Children).

>>>>>And I think you got your broader scope feedback last week, that the writing is smooth and pretty much error-free.

Yes, thanks again :-)

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A two-part reply O.o (sorry for being long-winded) lilian_cho May 5 2005, 18:56:50 UTC

Thanks for reviewing :-)

I provided a vocab link to alihotsy at the end of both chapters ( ... )

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Thank you! lilian_cho May 5 2005, 20:34:40 UTC

>>>>>Dialogue...Snape wondering internally why the Headmaster sent the Hogwarts Potions instructor to be the liaison to Beauxbatons.

Thanks! It didn't occur to me. *tinker more*

Yeah, the alihotsy thing...I wonder where I can insert it. The first time I mentioned alihotsy maybe? *ponder*

>>>>>You've rated this G and declared it AU; "slash" is not my first thought when I see those terms.

Good. *sigh of relief* I've been so conflicted re: plugging this fanfic in gen comm.s, ship comm.s, slash comm.s...IMO it's a genfic, although you can read H-D ship into it. Or, erm, "pre-slash"?

>>>>>I also don't objectify Draco in the way that you describe.

Good to hear. You do know of the existence of bottom_draco etc., right? I believe there's bottom_harry too. But I think slashers more readily adopt the idea of Draco as a "dom" because he acts like a stereotypical gay (the whining, the hair care). On the other hand, Harry's "the straightest gay guy ever ( ... )

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